A Broken Hearted Revision

 

Each day

My heart is breaking

Into thousand little pieces

Left me to wondering

If I'll be able to

Put them back together again, without crying

 

In all of life's trials

Or hidden meanings

I fear most the silence

Foreboding, consuming

It leaves my mind unstable

Confusion that's bewildering

 

In my gloomy days

I'm left thinking

If I had kept my innocence

Had I been capable of doing

Then would I be the same

This at times I'm wishing

 

Til this day

I am still aching

As your presence

Continues its teasing

To no end I'm unable

At forgetting (Your name)

 

Author's Note

The last part, not sure if this had made a difference on the consistency of the rhyming. But it adds understanding to the message.

Reviews

[Kelly D. Burris]

Nice piece.
In all of life's hidden meanings
I fear most the silence
That leaves my mind unstable
Confused, bewildered I remain

I liked this part the best. Silence leave a lot for the imagination to take hold of....
Adding to my library.

[Imperfection]

Til this day I'm still aching

As your presence here teases me

To no end I'm unable

To just forget your name

I love the last stanza most of all. But each line here is so painful. I'm wounded. Once again...

[Kat_apult]

Very nice imagery V! Especially the first part about your heart breaking; you summed it up very nicely and really showed how it feels when this happens to someone! I could really feel your emotion at the end when your heart continues to feel the pain...perhaps still thinking about and recalling memories from the past...