Footprints in the Snow

So this is a song I wrote, I thought I'd just post the lyrics.

we all knew we'd never be good enough,

but that didn't stop us from trying.

you have your conquests and i have mine

I never said I was the forever kind.

year after year we find ourselves here

deathly afraid of we might miss

and as the calendar carries on,

we stand still in this.

and i don't know, know, know

if our love will bloom and grow

but our footprints in this snow

seem to always lead to each other.

you and i are like a firecracker in the winter

laid on a foundation of a practical joke

it don't make any sense at all,

but never the less, still fun to watch go up in smoke

we are the children getting punished but never learning

we are the soapbox thieves

we are the laughing in the corner at a funeral

for our dignity

and i don't know, know, know

if our love will bloom and grow

but our footprints in this snow

seem to always lead to each other

to each other...

to each other...

to each other.

Reviews

[GamingGal]

Pros: An interesting little story is told here, and I like it. I like your choice of words and how you laid them out in each line. It didn't rhyme, but those words clicked and flowed together perfectly. I liked the repetition of those lines you used here and there.

Cons: Just a grammar error, I think. Third stanza, third line, change "don't" to "doesn't" Unless you meant it that way.

Overall: I like this, especially the trailing off thoughts in the end. Very nice.