you are like......

 

 You are like the beats of my heart

 Which just can never be apart……

                        

 You are like the leaf of a tree

 That just give everything for free…..

 

 You are like the essence of love

 As pure as the feather of dove……

 

 You are like the water of rain

 That’s what everyone one want to gain….

 You are like the purity of soul

 Exist forever as a whole.....

 

You are like the words of the book

 i can understand with just a look….

 

You are like the fragment of gold

As true as the words i told…………………

Reviews

[barleygirl]

In your love poem, you have done a great job of using many comparisons to help the reader visualize & feel each aspect of the love you are describing. I think a few of your observations are a little simplified, but you're 14, & this is what love looks like & feels like at your age. It gets much more complicated later on . . . as you write more & more, you'll be able to add more complexity to your message, too. Even tho I like your cheerful & adoring comparisons here, I encourage you to present a picture of love that has ups & downs, which is more realistic for the way life & love actually go. Tension is what makes a good story and it also happens in life all the time. So, just keep that in mind for future writing.

[Vedant Rao]

thank you....
thank you for your review, i have recently uploaded a new poem as you suggested so please just have a look look to it, and yes i have recently publish a book " the poetry of my life " and yes it is available on amazon.com please just buy it it is available as kindle edition for free for five days this is the link https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B01LYEGNB4 please just buy it and yes please tell your friends to buy it, yes you must be thinking i am doing advertising yes its true but its my first book to be publish so please buy it its free and yes thank you once again

[horizon]

The last 3 stanzas are really awesome..I liked them very much...and rhyming is again very good....

[Vedant Rao]

thanks for your review horizon ;-) THANK YOU VERY MUCH
please keep reviewing my work
thanks once again and yes please buy my kindle book "the poetry of my life"