The power to dream.

Again an old poem I found on my previous blog.

Deep blue water
submerges thousand grains of sand.
Granular water
smoothly changes direction,
back and forth,
Curled tiny waves
overwhelming bare feet.
Observed by colorful pears and shells,
inspired by the feet’s ability
to pace
back and forth.
They let themselves go
with the power of the sea.

Just to feel like them.

Reviews

[Atheana Kylee-S. C.]

Wow, such a powerful poem :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I dream about oceans a lot, where I just close my eyes and I am walking along the shorline, having the waves roll over my toes and feet. Oceans inspire me because they have a sense of...purity, could I say? Great write!

[Cassandra D.]

I thought it was pretty good...
Well done.

[A-Lovely-Anxiety]

I really like this piece, it's something you can keep tossing around in your mind. With the title, I never expected an ocean, so that was a great turn-out. Keep it up!!

[Coyote Poetry]

The ocean is the motivator for many. It made me find my pen again and write once again. The poem is powerful. The description took me to the ocean. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetry Girl]

its a nice poem and it has a pretty good flow and ive noticed a few errors. i think the title doesnt exactly fit. but still, a good poem.

[KL]

It should be 'submerges [a] thousand grains of sand,' it sounds better.

This life is definitely a little more freeing when you just let go... no worries about where the tide is going to take you but rather dealing with the big waves when they come. Complexity in a simplistic poem, nice.

[NSisifo]

The only crit I may have seen:
"Observed by colorful pear[l]s and shells,"

I agree with FlawedByDesign. It's simple, but elegant.

[FlawedByDesign]

A very picturesque and descriptive poem. Lovely imagery for such a simple moment, but not one less deserving of attention and beautiful words.

Nicely done.

[Sports Girl]

I loved the imagery. beautiful poem.