I really like this and the ending is very powerful, I only have one problem with it. It feels sort of forced, like you didn't feel like writing, but did anyway. Despite this, it is a very nice piece and it is also powerful. It hit home with the ending and forced some feelings out of me having had someone close to me suffer like this and me wishing them to over come it. Great job with this and I like this style also. =)
poignant in its brevity and shorter burst of lines~ relates the frustration and helplessness one feels in the face of a loved one's illness~ well written and related poem~
I grab every opportunity, life is my sincerity, and my sincerity is bliss.
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