Running around town.

Something I just wrote 10 minutes ago.

Running around town in my dirty shoes,

Going fast and slow, on the rhythm of my life.

Trying to exhale all bad memories,

Whilst attempting to take a positive future in.

My feet hit the ground with a repeating sound,

Like a drum during a fancy rock show.

Shaking all the dirt in between the notches

Of my dirty shoes’ sole away.

There goes the past and here comes the future,

I arrive back home

with a brand new pair of shoes.

Reviews

[Moonflower]

This was very real to me, great writing. :) I really liked it

[HappyTaylor]

Gave me shivers! :)

[Needy]

I like this writing

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

wonderful metaphor for emotional cleansing!~

[deeps]

This is wonderful,

Whilst attempting to take a positive future in.
My feet hit the ground with a repeating sound,

I love these lines, this is amazing

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A clever use of metaphor ..this is good, really interesting..well done

[DamienHino]

what brand of shoes did you get? cool poem..=D

[Seashell]

If only it was as simple eh ?? T'would be great...when things get tough... to get out there to the shoe shop and buy a new day, week, month or year.

Great thought V
Thanks

Babsie xx