Running around town.

Something I just wrote 10 minutes ago.

Running around town in my dirty shoes,

Going fast and slow, on the rhythm of my life.

Trying to exhale all bad memories,

Whilst attempting to take a positive future in.

My feet hit the ground with a repeating sound,

Like a drum during a fancy rock show.

Shaking all the dirt in between the notches

Of my dirty shoes’ sole away.

There goes the past and here comes the future,

I arrive back home

with a brand new pair of shoes.

Reviews

[Void Unspoken]

Your poetry is amazing and inspirational! I love this and appreciate that you shared it. Sorry it took so long to get to it though.

[Casper]

I agree with FireWomen. This is really cool. I like it. You're a very good poet.

[FireWoman]

I like the idea here, very nice

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is interesting. I like the last line. Very nice. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

We need a good pair of shoes. I don't like those blisters. A very good poem. Nothing better then a fresh pair of shoes.
Coyote

[Liza]

this is a pretty cool moment where you write in the now about a past and a hopeful future

[~~~~~]

Your analogy is interesting. Shoes being comparable to your past and future. The dirt equating to less than stellar experiences. Shaking off the old, embracing the new as one tread through the stages of life so to speak. Very good, not bad for ten minutes!

[Matt G]

Wow very good =)

[nono]

Sometimes that's how things are at school....running trying to make it to class, can really tire a person out....that's why i take frequent cat naps...lol...i like this though it has very good points.

[loowzerX]

I like the simile "Like a drum during a fancy rock show"..maybe cause I love drums hehe! Either way, it's pretty good, especially the contrast of the shoes :)