I'm growing up

I’m growing up.
the ones around me have to accept
the choices I make, the roads I want to walk.
I don’t want to make anyone upset
by getting black coffee in my white cup.
I want to see the perfectly shaped fumes
rising from a heart-made cup of tea,
Warming my trembling hands as I
take my first few steps.

Reviews

I like this poem a lot, but your punctuation is very bad. I will show you how to fix this very easily to make a very nice sounding rhythmic poem.

I’m growing up[.]
the ones around me have to accept[ ]
the choices I make, the roads I want to walk.
I don’t want to make anyone upset[ ]
by getting black coffee in my white cup.
I want to see the perfectly shaped fumes[ ]
rising from a heart-made cup of tea,
Warming my trembling hands as I
take my first few steps.

Simple omitting of a couple commas can greatly move the reader down the page and really make them feel the nice rhyme you have. The addition of a period in the beginning helps build tension before the release. Tell me if this helped you. Thanks. Great poem

[HappyTaylor]

Aww This is really sweet to me. I love the way it flows and the message is wonderful, and simple. :) Lovely! Keep writing darling!

[Needy]

Great writing

[dovetailer]

growing up...free to make your own choices and mistakes...to use what you have been taught and learn the lessons your choices will teach...
oh, to be young again...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

enchanting~ the hardest thing for those who love you to do is permit you spread your wings and begin your own journey~ an inevitability~ engaging~ strong composition~

[Penulis Kecil]

Growing up is always hard to do, isn't it?

I absolutely love the lines "I want to see the perfectly shaped fumes, / rising from a heart-made cup of tea" in this one. I feel like you could make some parts of it more powerful if you play with the line breaks and punctuation a little, though.