Puppet Master

This was written as a free write and took me about 5 minuets.

Baby, be my puppet master,
play with my heart.
Take it from me, tare it out
and apply those little strings.
Control me my puppet master
Take my heart and control my love.

Take me away, a sweet escape.
Bring me lust, bring me love.
Bring me you, bring me, me.
Make me feel those feelings I shouldn’t feel.
The feelings I already feel.

Make me experience those feelings.
The ones I have for you.
The unacceptable feelings
the feelings I have for you.
Control me baby, take me, make me.

Be my puppet master
Make me do as you please.
Control my heat.
I beg you please.

Author's Note

Tell me what is good and what needs some work?

Reviews

[Antoñyo]

Oh my....I'm possibly the wrong person to ask advice hear --- it's near perfect to me! (with one mispell, "tear")
This is the rapture, the feeling of love at its best and purest...before the ways of reality kick in and screw it all up with that ol' come to your senses thingie! At least, that's how I see this.

Thanks for wonderful memory [100/100]

[Relic]

Impressive writing for a spontaneous idea. Nice rhythm to it and makes sense. Nice.

[Kasaundra]

Thank you kindly!

[Relic]

My pleasure.

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

i love this, Its sensuous Playful and a little seductive. and very romantic, The yearning for a lover to take you on that magical journey of pure bliss. Excellent write! 100/100