Life Simplified or Reasons To Die Young

Someone is reading this at least once a day. If it is you, tell me who you are, I'm curious. I don't think this one is particularly good.

March 22, 2o1o / 1:15 am

Plucking your bestie
From a pool of clones,
You weave your way
Through polite society.
A rare variety of
Naivete.

And when
The time comes, you
Are lonesome and
Loathsome in the
General direction of
Home.

It passes.
Eventually there is a
Pause that refreshes.
A white dress and then
Later black. You pluck
Your bestie from a pool
Of crones, weave your
Way through polite antiquity.

Reviews

[Alessander]

Plucking your bestie
From a pool of clones,
You weave your way
Through polite society.
A rare variety of
Naivete.

It passes.
Eventually there is a
Pause that refreshes.
A white dress and then
Later black. You pluck
Your bestie from a pool
Of crones, weave your
Way through polite antiquity.

And when
The time comes, you
Are lonesome and
Loathsome in the
General direction of
Home.


this is how I read it, for some reason. It's just a rearranging - think that home line is the best.

[fireblossom]

Sweet. Said allot with few words... I always like that.

It has attitude and zip. Wow I used the word zip...jeez what does that mean? Not the word but that fact I used it!

Your poem is another little blessing. Thanks.

[Orlando Murcia]

This sounds as if this person hurt you
in some way

I am not sure but that's what I got

Great choice of words and creativity

[theludus]

i think this rocks..... you did the friend request and this was my first stop in seeing whether we might be able tolerate each other. I think i'll be fine, not so sure about you. This is good work, fresh, clever, simple, and intricate. be back.

[Juliette Cross]

Oh and it goes on and on... this reads so pretty to me. I really like it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem a lot. Such power in each line. You took me in many directions and the ending was very good. Your usage of the language made poem a pleasure to read. Thank you.
Coyote