He Says

I am listening to Together by William Shatner. Say what you want, the song is so easy to write to.

November 8, 2009 / 2:17 am

I grasp the underside
Of tomorrow and flip.
Heads up I stay in
Bed, tails I fly to
Mars and back. He
Says calm down.
They all say calm
Down. There is no
Calm in hearts aflame.
No calm for seas
In storm. I press play,
Was there ever a pause?
The drum heart beat
Mimics my own and
I wonder where I went.
What street I wandered.
She used to say time is
A luxury. I run a bath tub
Full of it and float while
Thinking of the subjective
Meaning of the word together.
This time, this space. I've
Said one of these days. I
Hope I mean it but in case
I don't, know this: words typed
Fill my mind to bursting. Eyes
Spy details and record. I soar.
I drift down. A balloon string
Tied to wrist. Don't pull too
Hard. He says calm down.



 

Author's Note

This is old school feeling to me. Then again that means nothing to people who haven't been reading me for years. Suffice to say, I'm not rhyming and there is no form.

Reviews

[V.B.]

I love the breaks in all the lines that leave the poem feeling horribly fragmented until you get to the end and piece everything together, and I love that you are almost surgical with your words. It is the poetry of the matter-of-fact, and it is awesome at that. I really enjoyed this--thank you for sharing it.

[E. A. Fielder]

I really liked this. Its kind of inspirational to me. It's not lovey dovey or uber dreary. Its not cryptic or too contemplative. It's thought put down as a poem with set feelings at a particular time but it holds no cliches. I like it!

[cest la vie]

I think the fellas (below me) have said it all..
Absolutely wonderful, Jazzy!!

[JustKeith]

I'm with BJH, f**k form! Well done!

[Dallisa <3]

very good free verse. sounds very real and easy to relate to. enjoyed it :P

[Tessah]

The best poems are often in free verse. Love it thank you

[BjH]

f**k form
but
love feeling
yours
benja'impressed'amin