Why is it so?

It is a poem which stresses out a girl's feelings who leaves no stone unturned to fulfill the desires of someone whom she loves and still she does not get attention from him

 

 

They are in our list of significant in our lives,

For whom we are always eager to turn true into lies,

We leave no stone unturned to see a smile on their face,

Who are placed first in our thought’s race.

 

Whose satisfaction makes us feel satisfied,

Whose anxieties make our mind worried,

But when we expect the similar from them,

Why is it so that they do not feel the same?

 

Our loyalty towards them is pure and firm,

In love and care whatever we perform,

How should we feel when we are not at all considered,

When towards them we have our concerns surrendered?

 

Our deeds for them is our love’s implication,

But our words to them turn out to be a kind of complication,

Our valuables are smaller than them in value,

Why is it so, we do not have any clue.

 

They need us to complete a song,

To aid them we make ourselves slog along,

But when the song is done with being sung,

The helper is forgotten who allowed his sleep to hung.

 

We can spend our savings that we resisted from spending,

As a sacrifice we can deprive ourselves from eating,

For them we tend to hurt who are good to us,

Why is it so that they don’t have time for us but to others?

 

We don’t know what to do when we know they are wrong,

We prove ourselves wrong making our good image getting dong,

Considering their wants and needs we ignore our other responsibilities,

In making them happy somehow we tend to increase our abilities,

 

From doing deeds that annoy them we try to restrain,

In doing anything for them we pay no heed to our pain,

We stop thinking about all the others when they are around,

Why is it so that in spite of all this in their minds we are hardly found?

Reviews

[KeeD]

Hey welcome to the cafe, cheers for the add.
Constructive criticism on this piece would be : A couple of grammar issues, proof read through it and you'll spot them out. I see the strife and emotion in these words, so excellent job conveying that. The concept is brilliant just work on the execution and you'll be sailing to a smooth start on the writerscafe and in your respective writing career. Hope the attention you seek shall no more be ignored, not I nor the world can turn a blind I towards the writings of a poetic girl. Keep writing, -Kee.

[Valencia Desouza]

thank you so much for your feedback. i liked your writings as well.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I have seen this happen many times .You try your best to be there for someone and you realize when you need them they are'nt there for you.This is a very good poem that rings very true.

[Valencia Desouza]

That's very true. I have seen and experienced such feelings personally too

[Vidya Bacchus]

well keep writing you're very good at it.

[Valencia Desouza]

thank you so much. i will upload more poems