Don't treasure me so much....

don't treasure me so much
that like the treasure lost in the woods
i will be lost forever

don't treasure me so much
that like the treasure caged inside a box
i will be caged
but make me a free bird
that could fly high above the sky

don't treasure me so much
that like every treasure
 all bad spirits will come to find me
but make me the ocean which could swallow everything

dont make me the treasure
which is so deep
but make me the sky
where infinity would like to reach
i wish to set me so high
where no one could get me...

Reviews

[Mirna]

your writing is really different, and i like the idea of the poem..well donee! keep going xxxx

[vaishnavi]

thanks for such lovely review :)

[Eve Ola]

throughout its very cativating. its a wonderful read. welldone

[vaishnavi]

thanks eve for this gr8 review

[vaishnavi]

thanks eve for this gr8 review

[vaishnavi]

thanks eve for this gr8 review

[vaishnavi]

actually sorry for this much lot of reviews my internet connection is running slow now a days so the comment was not posting so i clicked on it several times and this much reviews got posted:P

[Saddam]

don't treasure me so much
that like every treasure
all bad spirits will come to find me
but make me the ocean which could swallow
everything.

Great lines dear friend. I like your thought and you must fly.

[vaishnavi]

thanks for this review

[Vidya Bacchus]

Really splendid poetry Vaish.I really loved your lines :)

[vaishnavi]

thanks Vidya for this lovely words
glad u liked it

[Vidya Bacchus]

I did.You are welcome :)

[Ranger Kessel]

very well written. I love it!

[vaishnavi]

thanks
glad u love it
i really appreciate ur reviews

[Cory Barrett]

This one is great. If you love me let me go, i will come back.

[vaishnavi]

thanks for reading and liking it :)

[bikergirl3636]

This is one of my favs of yours!

[vaishnavi]

glad it is your favorite and glad again that u like my poems :)
keep on reading

[Emily]

I love this poem! I like you lay out of it! Keep it up!

[vaishnavi]

thanks Emily for reviewing so gr8 :)

[Parimal Pratyush]

Lovely poem.. Very beautifully crafted. God has made everybody with a purpose but we do wish to be a certain way. We expect people to treat us like the bird or the sky or the ocean, instead the ones who love us become way too possesive and treat us like the treasure. Heart touching :D

[vaishnavi]

thanks for this lovely review
glad u liked it :)

[Anahat]

beautiful piece..something different..
Keep up the good work :)

[vaishnavi]

thanks Anahat for motivating me to work better

[Anahat]

your welcome :)