Incomplete

In the midst of love...
I feel so insane...
Taking a glimpse of this world...
I feel so absurd..

In the darkness not so bright..
I feel so deprived..
At the time of great fight..
I feel like an innocent child..

Like the poets of night..
I feel so ignite..
If i disbelief and i delete..
Why i still feel so incomplete...

Author's Note

that's just a random piece...again i wrote it in midnight...:D

Reviews

[LonelySoul]

thoughts on a note pad will sometimes become the greatest of ideas
but if you don't connect those dots,
it will stay just thoughts scribbled on paper.
when we step back to look at the big picture,
take in everything around us,then we become whole,
and as we find ourselves in our center,we become complete.

[poetic soul]

incompleteness....such a pathetic feeling...you have everything but still, when something is missing, so much so that you feel incomplete is the worst phase of life...hope this aint real for you and if it is, hope it doesnt stay for long! loved the read...short - to the point and made so much sense...

:) Love,
Krishna

[Ama May Cooper]

I have to say i am somewhat let down by this piece, i will write truthel reviews and i aplogise if any offend you.
But this piece is lacking in what i normally like about your pieces, it seems slow and laboured.
There are bits of great intamicy but im lost within the parts of almost no emotion

[Kelley]

The heart often asks the mind why?
You did a great job of telling us why
we wonder in the dark sometimes.

Great write.

[mystic soul]

So beautifully written! Some times i too feel this way... you have everything but you feel like there is nothing... Wonderful!

[Honeypot]

I like it. It's kind of free thought and it works. Nice job!

[closed account]

sometimes the best work comes out of random unexpected thoughts
like this... wonderful!!

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Innocence is buried at the core of every human at many ages.. your emotions flow out very nicely here.. for your age this was very full of feelings you fight to balance life and this came out really well creatively.. keep up the great work!

[Nish Nish the Fish]

ugh i feel incredibly the same way right now!!
again i say, love the midnight poems. they show the most feeling and the most honesty.
i can tell this poem is powerful and i love that i can relate to it so well.
keep writing!!
Nish

[Raven Radke]

i loved it..it was beautiful as midnight