My love....

I cried for none.....

But for the one...

Love of my life....

But not in sight...

 

Reviews

[Samith Pich]

Simple, cute & poignant. I even like the trailing of the dot-dot-dots - it's like a long sigh we all take with you. Thanks for sharing

Samith

[stars are far]

we all cry for the one we love ..
and this is a very nice feeling same time dark and hurtful ..

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I agree with Austin that this is a very complex piece of writing and every individual can have a different outlook towards it...But this is what the beauty of poetry is!
Amazing work :)

[Just Plain Me]

This is something everyone can relate too...that one person you loved but never looked at you.
great job :]

[John J. Smiley]

Yes, clever, like many others you have written. Makes the the reader decide what the words should mean. Very nice!

[Alice Oiseau]

Hm. I saw this in a way, probably unintended. But I'll make it more realistic: Lovers torn apart, and one cries for the other (presuming the other has died), ergo not in sight. Heart-wrenching.
Good write.
Cheers.

[LlamaLord]

There a number of ways you can read this poem. Some sound differently than others, giving it sort of a different meaning. Wonderfully clever

-Austin

[Alias Fletcher]

I like the photo... so dejected and alone. I wonder who you are waiting for and how long you will wait. My experience is it more productive just to go get them! Love and Hugs, charly

[LonelySoul]

altho your writing may be your claim to fame,what is up with the change of name?

[Ralphy]

Your good at this Vaishali...this short poem says so much that one can't but wonder how you became so clever. I love the way this is written...nice write