Calm down, little child For you know nothing Still, you're ignorant In this vast world Filled With mysteries And unknown,-- bounded
Still you should be nourished Be fed, by wisdom Infused, with knowledge Nurtured with love, and Awaken, by truth's light For you can't stand alone
Alone in the darkness You should dwell in yourself For you, is still a stranger A stranger in confusion Search for a true you For you're the one who know you
Then you start trembling In this cold battle called life With, still, many to unveil A life is like a war Where everything is a matter of Life of death, do or die
You need to struggle, Sacrifice and be wounded For that wound will be your teacher Thereafter, those struggles You shall be rewarded For those deeds will have its worth
There, you shall triumph, remembering You're still on the same ground Then and there, you are you Because you knew you
you write of truth...
we are who we are...
we need to find what we are...
we need to be the wind in our own sails...
and that journey...whether it bring joy or pain...will bring us full circle...
we are who we are...
The point of the poem was very clear until the last stanza. You could almost do without it. There are also some errors with word choice and punctuation. I would suggest going over it once more and maybe reading it out loud. I liked where the 'life is like war' simile could have gone. Life being a matter of life and death is too obvious and doesn't pose a reason for your simile. However, I did like that a wound could be one's teacher.
Official, any poem you might have, is directly related to my life, damn you! And it was very good, very wise and true words spoken from an expert poet :D
We are youth once, and it will pass just once but we are morphing into a man full of wisdom. WE have to instill to youth the wisdom of virtuous life, that it could bring us happiness to the extent of knowing nothing but a serene way of living into a productive life!
We are youth once, and it will pass just once but we are morphing into a man full of wisdom. WE have to instill to youth the wisdom of virtous life, that it could bring us happiness to the extent of knowing nothing but a serene way of living into a productive life!
I am no one....nothing special; just a common guy with common thoughts and principles. I've lived and led a common life but remarkable. There are no monuments dedicated to me and my name will soon be .. more..