Life with dream

Dream like eagle,
Who flies thousands feet above in sky,
Flies like the sky is made for him,

              Dream as the life without it is,
               The life of animal who eat,drink and sleep,

Dream as you are here,
To create some uniqueness,

Dream because you are here to do,
That the rest of the world can't do,
                 And once you dream then,

Tell every obstacle that,
You are here to fulfill your dream,

Show the world,
Why you are created,
Among the thousands of others,

             Make the world to say that,
             Life is not life without dream

Author's Note

what do you think about it...

Reviews

[Richard Man]

Were you intentionally writing eaglese; did you plan to leave out words? I was able to read it and put in the missing words without loosing height and without loosing sight of my prey... Flight in my dreams is so important. To dream and to have a dream are so fundamentally important for our personal sanity and psychological safety.

[eagle style]

Thanks for your review

[quinfinn]

the eagle is a popular and well known spirit guide in native culture... i was chosen by the wolf, personally. very nice write...work on developing your use of syntax if English is not your primary language...this is a wonderful effort.

[Lily Finch]

true... ..dats spirit :)

[Zahra]

wonderfully inspirational

[Lily Finch]

agreee

[Salar Majak]

the poem itself flows like a beautiful dream and looks like one as well! dreams! we all need dreams in order to survive! great poem!!!! thoroughly enjoyed

[eagle style]

Thanks a lot

[CecilA]

Eagle,

Here's my interpretation of your poem:

Dream like an eagle,
That flies a thousand of feet above;
Like the sky is made
Just for him.

Dream as if your life is like
That of an animal
Which simply
Eats, drinks and sleeps.

Dream as if your are here
To create a uniqueness.
Dream of what you are here to do
And what the rest of the world could do.

Once you dream
Show every obstacle that
You, out of thousands of others,
Are here to fulfill your dream.

Help the whole world understand,
"Life is not life without a dream."

I apologize for perhaps going overboard but you requested my thoughts, so I took the liberty to show you how I would have written it. I hope this has been helpful.

[WingsToFly]

Good work, CecilA.
But for one part of it, i think it eagle meant to say that life without dream is like the life of an animal.

[CecilA]

So you substitute the line: "Dream as if your life is like" to

"Without a dream,
life is like that of an animal
which eats, drinks and sleeps.
It simply exists."

Or something like that.

Glad to be of help. But don't take my word for what you believe your poem means.

[WingsToFly]

Thank you, :-) let's see what the writer of this poem has to say on that.

[eagle style]

Thank you,,i said that without dream life is like the life of animals who just eat,drink and sleep...so our life should be full of dreams..and our dreams should be as high as do the eagle fly..

[WingsToFly]

Thanks for explaining eagle

[Cara]

great write ^_^

[eagle style]

thanks

[WingsToFly]

Encouraging poetry, ambiguous at some places though.

[WingsToFly]

Nice thoughts, thanks for sharing. Keep writing.