Strange Voices.

All about the struggle within my head.

Steven

Steven!

Put yourself together

Stop drooling profusely

She's Beautiful

We all can see that

No one is that blind to disagree

But this isn't the right way.

Strange thoughts forming  in my soul.

Get off me.

Eyes should never be taking off her

A momentarily blink

A slight shift in glance

And *Perfection* would be lost.

Am trapped

For once in my life

I have no intention of breaking free.

Let me bask in your presence Miss

Fill my eyes to the brim

Till I can take no more.

You all I want

A touch of your lips,

Fingers running through your hair

Steamy hands parting those thighs

What more can I wish for.

But wait a minute,

What is this?

whispers caressing my Ears

Strange voices urging me up

Steven

Steven!

Wake up you F00l

You dreaming again

Keep Stealing Shakespeare's journals

You never getting her with that

A thousand words spoken

A million writeups spilled

And you not an inch closer 

In making her yours

Give up now

Save yourself from this foolish quest

Or haven't you heard?

The good guys never gets the girl.

Author's Note

Air Your Views please.

Reviews

[bobric]

Nicely written. left a vivid impression. Well chosen words. You left out anything that didn't push the theme. Here are a few easily corrected mechanical changes you might consider.
eyes should never be taking (taken) off her

You (are) all I want
whispers (Whispers) caressing my Ears (ears)
Wake up you FOOl (FOOL)

[Mr.Writer]

great job! :)
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Thanks!!