You are.

I sappy love poem for my first boyfriend. God how naive I was! lol

You are my inspiration
You make my life worth living
Without any hesitation,
A thousand kisses I'd be giving

You are my beautifully darkened cloud
On an annoyingly sunny day
You make me want to scream out loud
When you make me feel this way

You are my well-needed breath of fresh air
After a toxic life's beginning
I'm broken now beyond repair
From the way my head's been spinning

You are everything I've ever wanted
And all I truly need
My memory is forever haunted
By the day my soul was freed.<3

Reviews

[Vanessa]

It's not really all that naive. It's sort of sweet, very sweet, actually. And I really like the phrase 'After a toxic life's beginning'.
Beautifully done.
Not the least bit naive.



-Vanessa Alyse

[she makes me weird]

Ah, how I relate to these words. It was put together well and flowed nicely. I like the simple honestly and intense emotion you show. Great piece

[Rave]

Wow Im in love with how it ends and I'm sure I'll remember this in the morning. I will be reviewing much more of your work. Simply wonderful.

[Marilyn My Bitterness]

Wow, I am actually really impressed. It flowed beautifully and I even found a touch of humor in it, "You are my beautifully darkened cloud/On an annoyingly sunny day" That made me chuckle. Great poem. Keep up the amazing work!

[neanie]

excellent poem.

[Lottie]

I think we've all been there... we're all so naive! Excellent poem, given well and i really like it