One Night

Well since it's my first time doing this please tell me if I hit the right buttons and made you all feel good inside.

Fill you with my lust 

Infect me with your passion

Your sweet breasts rubbing 

against my body, filling me with fire

Every inch of me  going deep

inside you making cry with pleasure

Pure ecstasy in your eyes

as your whole body 

shakes with elation

Your smooth pale skin 

beaded with sweat as 

you pump me dry 

Pure pleasure is mapped

on your face as we 

both achieve the peak

 Our bodies weak

tired and spent

stumble in a heap

Tired but pleased we lie 

on top of each other like

wild animals in heat

Tonight was great

now let's forget about 

each other when we wake up

Reviews

[topsyturvy]

A fine description of a one night stand :) The ending didn't do it for me though, coz for me you lost the flow of the poem. But that's just my opinion. As a whole though you did a good job for your first time :P

[lovemenot]

hey, ralph. i love this poem! so much! you told me you didn't write these types. it's amazing.

[Kira]

Pretty cliche stuff until the last stanza, which gives a whole different tone to the poem but can't manage to save it.

[Coyote Poetry]

From years of education. Those one night stands can haunt your later. I roamed the USA for 15 years. Had a hell of a good time being single and free. The poem told a good story. I recommend if you want a escape. Leave before the other person awake. A entertaining poem. Thank you.
Coyote