Love Poem

poetry speaks

Hello,
it's been awhile...
it's been sometime since we held hands.
We've never held hands.
Not in real life that is.

I'm not in love with you,
and you're not really you.
Then who am I talking with?
No one, myself.
Yes, me.

How sad that must sound.
No one is there,
yet in my mind someone is there.
Oh, how I love that nobody,
and that nobody so loves me.

We have been together for so long.
Though every time is the first,
every time we choose each other.
How this story is my reality,
but it's not reality.

I can explain her...
your every detail!
Your long black hair,
slim body, soft hands,
such warm and soft hands.

And her face!
Wait....
your face?
It's empty, just white.
But it has so much love.

I'm talking to no one.
So do I say her...
or you?

Still, it's no one.

How confusing this must be,
however I love it.
This is my favorite love poem,
because this is my love poem.

To no one.

Reviews

[AliciaB]

This is a very cool poem exploring the idealization of a love interest who doesn't currently exist except for in the speaker's mind. I really like the description of the person, especially the part about the face being blank but having "so much love." Just a couple grammar things: "you're" instead of "your" in stanza 2 line 2, and "there" instead of "their" in stanza 3 lines 2 and 3. Very interesting overall, the idea of a love poem "To no one." Nice work!

[unspokenpain]

thank you. I'll fix those errors right away.

[Lost, n'MT]

I can relate so well... well very written and expressed. Excellent job at capturing the pain, wonderfully done.

[unspokenpain]

It strikes a chord doesn't it. I'm glad you felt my words. :)

[Lost, n'MT]

Absolutely, you expressed it so well and accurately and it strongly and deeply hits home... Thank you for sharing.

[unspokenpain]

Your very welcome friend