Me, Myself, and I

Poetry Speaks

Have you ever seen a full crowd, but none came to see you. Have you ever hung out with friends, but came home to a darkened room. Do you bottle your emotions, because there's know one to tell them to. Do you smile and laugh in public, but cry alone til your face is blue. Can you share your accomplishments, or do people see them useless. Can you say your love is warm, or is it cold because of darkness. Is it possible to have so many people around you, but still be lonely? Is it possible to be weak and hurt, but look strong and happy? ......I once heard that "you're only lonely when you're with others." I don't understand, yet I do. To me this isn't just a quote, but a thought I believe is true. To me this isn't just a poem, but me saying I know that pain, for those who know it too.

Reviews

[Stan Lee]

Hey, fantastic poem. Lots of emotions and a nice way of ending on a sympathetic note. There are just a few spelling errors that caught my attention.
Line 6 should read: because there's no one to tell them to.
Line 16 should read: "you're"
Also, twice you have said "but yet" I suggest you use either word, but not both as they essentially mean the same thing in this context. :)

[unspokenpain]

Thank you! This is one of my older one's from high school. I wasn't the best at grammar back in the day.

[AliciaB]

Uh... yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, yes, and YES. I have felt all of these things before, and the way you present them is so poignant and open and sad that I really related to this poem. I really like the lines "Can you say your love is warm, / or is it cold because of darkness[?]" Our love for other people can indeed become tainted by our own brokenness - welcome to being human. Sarcastic yay. The last stanza of this poem is incredibly beautiful. The paradox of understanding, the rhyme, the somewhat chaotic yet rhythmic structure, and the emotion in the final line... it blew me away. You did a wonderful job of voicing that pain throughout this poem. Excellent work!

[unspokenpain]

Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it. This is one of my earlier poems I wrote in high school so i'm glad it's loved!