Feelings of redemption

Not all love is redeemed

Theres days were Im down yet your smile always brightens my night.

You stood their with long brown hair and pretty blue eyes. 

I sit there and stare with awe at what could never be yet, 

I cant stop thinking about you. 

Feelings of love I have toward you ,yet worthless they are for they can never be

 redeemed...

Not by you, Not by me, forever they stay buried deep.

You will never accept them so I withhold them from you in fear.

You would laugh in my face, yet I keep them close. 

My friends call me  foolish  they say I have false hopes and even worse no sense. 

Yet I still await the day when I achieve victory over fear, but until then I will keep them with me hidden from you until finally there seen, until finally there 

redeemed...

Author's Note

My fifth poem I wrote for Valentines Day

Reviews

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

They say one is always more nervous when writing about love. I believe this to be true, for when we are nervous, we often let our hands twitch more upon the pen on page, or keys on the computer. =) There were som grammatical errors and spelling typo's in this that detract from the flow, but i won't go into detail about them. =)

Personally this poem makes me ask a question...Why not take the risk? At least then, one would know the answer and be able to move in a direction that doesn't act like an anchor on the soul. That's my thought anyhow. =)

I've always thought if you care about someone, you should tell them. If they don't share those feelings, then that's okay, because it wasn't mean to be and in the end probably would have made both parties unhappy if a relation had tried and then flopped.

XO - Kate

[unspoken_hero]

A lot of times I dont write from my point of view; I write from my understanding, or perception of anothers view. Just telling them is easier said than done, many people fear what might happen.

[Cara]

Great and amazing write ^_^

[unspoken_hero]

thanks for the review Cara im glad you liked it