Age Old Insanity

This piece is not God bashing so don't get upset till you read it and it's notes.

Grace faltered as the words slide from between cursed lips. 

Cracked and peeling, so these truths emerge from their husk.

Truths now appearing as outdated concepts, hand me downs from a decaying chromosome.
Those truths now fail to reach me, all those gods who still beseech me.
Bring your siege, bring your dogs of war... bring forth my moment of despair.

Broken am I beyond their repair...

I raise not my sword, I lay down my shield... strike me down and watch me learn .
Strike me again and again until all the matches burn,

Turning this all to ash, all this too must pass...

Looking now over the ashes, is it all you sought, or... all for naught?
Kingdoms of men all built to fall, built to bend... built as a race's coffin for an unknown end.
These hopes, these ideals I can no longer defend, 

we speed ourselves toward what we can't comprehend. 
Come now  my conquers, come with your shackles and your religion.
Come before me with your gods of old, 

with your grief stricken beliefs tied to your side as a sheath.
There is no relief to the weight of carrying another's belief.

The burden of hope is the same as the yolk of true humanity.
A real humanity relying on a possible god... that my friends is the true insanity.

Author's Note

This simply reflects my thoughts that one should depend on self before any God to fix everything we ourselves set to wrongs.
" God does for those who do for themselves " ----- I heard this a lot growing up.

Reviews

[M Sanders]

I am truly astounded! Though you have expressed the intentions of this piece, you have left this open for interpretation. Open for each reader to decide how they may connect with this work of art. For example: a sense of power in defiance, spiritually lost, religious hypocrisy, or atheism ( just to mention a few ). I find this a dark wonder of a poem but I am intrigued:)

Your friend
M

[unsavable_soul]

Dear M,
You honor me with this, as I have read your works and found them leaps beyond my own. I try to never convey directly my intent as I feel that it removes enjoyment from the piece, plus I consider myself a bit of an enigma in the mirror. Look forward to reading more of you art.
Sincerely
Christopher

[M Sanders]

Thanks,such a great compliment:) Your work inspires me, so keep it up. I should be submitting some new work soon ;)

Your friend
M

[unsavable_soul]

I look forward to it.
Chris

[Nestor Gonzalez]

Those truths now fail to reach me, all those gods who still beseech me.
Bring your siege, bring your dogs of war... bring forth my moment of despair.
Broken am I beyond their repair...
I raise not my sword, I lay down my shield... strike me down and watch me learn .
Strike me again and again until all the matches burn,
Turning this all to ash, all this too must pass...
Looking now over the ashes, is it all you sought, or... all for naught?

pretty damn epic

[unsavable_soul]

Than you Nestor,
I try.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Nestor Gonzalez]

you succeed.

[Azriel]

good piece, though i might see some things differently i cannot deny that this is well written.
a lot of great images here as well, also really liked these lines:
"Strike me again and again until all the matches burn,
Turning this all to ash, all this too must pass...
Looking now over the ashes, is it all you sought, or... all for naught?"

[unsavable_soul]

To be clear the piece reflects man need to not rely on any Gods but to only call on their aid in the things we already must all seek to change for the better future. I am glad you were still able to find good in something you yourself disagree with, this speaks volumes unto your character.
I thank you for your kind words.
Sincerely
Chris

[Azriel]

no problem and you're very welcome

[tamsen grier]

There is great rhythm in this poem, a steady beat that really propels me through the lines. I love the allusion to "dogs of war" and the line "kingdoms of men all built to fall." It gives me chills actually!

[unsavable_soul]

I am more than glad that anything I do could invoke that level of emotion or thought. You are too kind in your gracious words. We all try and most often succeed in my opinion.
Sincerely
Chris

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Brillaint write, Sir Christopher. A splendid way to put it into perspective. Genius!

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you so much, I am filled with inspiration at such powerful words.
Sincerely
Chris

[Aisha Mnd]

Great job! I share the same thoughts. :)

[unsavable_soul]

I am put to blush.
Thank you I am glad in any sense as odd as it might sound that before anyone can say a word to me I have captured some part of them.
Thanks
Chris