Fragile Nature

Love and Hate make for the most fragile of existences.

This place is dark...

with the thoughts you bleed across the floor.
These words are meaningless, Your greed consumes all of you... 
right down to the truths.
This moment a constant reminder of your fickle nature.
These hopes seem wrong, seem like chains...
They bind me with regret.
Am I apathetic or you perhaps just a bit too sympathetic?
Regardless the decay sets in.
We are the dust created when two immovable objects...
are pushed together by equally unstoppable forces,...

we are Love and Hate...

It's out come...

Fate

Author's Note

Thoughts?

Reviews

[Mother Maggie]

Again you amaze me. In your words I see a tangle of love/hate,pleasure/pain,clarity/confusion all rolled into one masterful piece. It is as if you have pierced the veins of your heart at some poignant moment and used what you found there as the ink to pen this exquisit poem, Bravo my friend

[unsavable_soul]

Thanks Maggie,
You are too kind here, I think this work lacks a lot but I appreciate such love for it. I place all my writing out there good, bad, or otherwise. I think I write to help me as much as to convey some art.
Ever grateful,
Christopher

[Nestor Gonzalez]

awesome,love and hate are relatives when you hate an ex it's because you loved them and that love still lingers on though now it's a distorted version of what once was,
apathetic that's the only thing that's felt once the love has truely dwindled,
good work :]

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you Nestor,
Oh yeah, this is about an ex for sure. But I find true hate for others much harder than for myself. Thank you for the support, I look forward to getting a chance to view your work as I find people with good insight tend to show it in their pieces and work too. See you soon.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Nestor Gonzalez]

haha it's always easier to see the flaws in others than in oneself,also whatever we ourselves do we justify,but you know at times those flaws or things that tick us off about a person can be a reflection of ourselves analyze what you point out about others then analyze your ownself it's a bit creepy hahaha

oh also i suppose i should point out just for the sake of constructive criticism
perhaps just a bit "too" sympathetic you put to instead of too
and outcome is one word.
i'm not very anal about spelling/grammar and all that but i noticed them
so i thought i should point them out so if you wish you fix them you could,
it's really nothing major it doesn't take away from your work in the least.

[unsavable_soul]

Well thank you,
ever so much. I do appreciate help, I need it as I am not big on grammar in works unless the author asks for it. I will fix that and truly appreciate. Please hit me with a read request on the other two works you mentioned. I would like to get to them tonight.
Sincerely
Christopher

[Nestor Gonzalez]

no problem don't mention it stuff like that happens,hell my comment above has some mistakes themselves hahaha "if you wish you fix them you could" we are only human and like i said it doesn't take away anything from the work.

[Cookie]

Nice meaning in this poem.I enjoyed how things had to be balanced in life.Good job!

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you Cookie,
Balance is very key to me in the sense I feel like the balancing point.read moreThank you Cookie,
Balance is very key to me in the sense I feel like the balancing point.
Personally I view that point as most unable to aid either side.
Chris

[Cookie]

Yeah I like your point of view.

[Harrisen Viator]

I love the battle that's going on in this. What's love without hate? Hate without love? You do a wonderful job showing the communication between the two, from Hate's point of view. Very deep, I thoroughly enjoyed this.

[unsavable_soul]

Thanks Harrisen,
I will say the intended feel of this piece was meant to be despair over the things one can't change. I think I may have failed a bit to convey that properly. I am very glad that you found enjoyment in it though. In no bad way I think I may need to review this and see where it strayed. If you have any insights please let me know.
I see you got the struggle within the piece so I am curious if you have any ideas about how I might have conveyed the despair aspect better?
Love the insight and look forward to reading your works.
Sincerely
Chris

[Harrisen Viator]

No problem Chris!
Well, now that you mention your intent on showing despair I can see it in this section:
"with the thoughts you bleed across the floor.
These words are meaningless, Your greed consumes all of you...
right down to the truths.
This moment a constant reminder of your fickle nature.
These hopes seem wrong, seem like chains...
They bind me with regret."

But, that's not what I felt when I first read it. Also, everyone is different, so we are all going to have different view points when we read this. Everyone has a different story that allows them to read into things differently, so you're good, because this is a well written poem.
-Harrisen

[unsavable_soul]

I appreciate the support, however I am gonna grill you... lol. No seriously I am curious what in this as you said, from your perspective... lead you to anger behind it. Answering this question for me might help my conveyance in future pieces so that a reader is more directly involved in the concept I have created. I noticed you yourself have a knack for creating the intent you want, I am just hoping to grow a little.
Any advice or thoughts would be very helpful, not required but definitely wanted.
Eagerly
Chris

[Harrisen Viator]

Well, it's mainly because of the consistent negativity that I feel flowing from it. I felt the hate, because it seems as if the speaker is coming down on themselves and how they are reacting to the situation they are in. Although, I may have been reading too much into it and not just seeing how it is.
-Harrisen

[unsavable_soul]

No excellent critique,
In fact that insight speaks volumes to your ability to view the deeper context of the writer writing the piece because I carry much inner anger and hate. I can see that it is likely this is pouring into my pieces even when unintended.
WOW!
Thank you Harrisen, your insight has been extremely productive to me and I mean that.
Definitely some food for thought.
I only hope in some way I can repay the favor for you some day in such an insightful way.
Thank you ever so much for this, you have helped more then you can know.
( no word for my high level of sentiment, to be found )
Christopher

[Harrisen Viator]

Wow, I'm so glad that I was able to help you see something that you yourself were unable to see while writing this piece. I'm glad that I could be of assistance to you and this has truly helped me become better at reading into poetry. If you ever need my help I would be glad to give it! And I'd be happy to receive any insight from you about one of my poems.
It was honestly a good experience for me, too.
-Harrisen

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you, Harrisen...
I look forward to bouncing the proverbial poetic ball back and forth with you.
I think you will do great things, with your writing and open minded aspect.
I'll be check in on your stuff believe me, this whole place is like a smorgasbord for me.
Chris

[Harrisen Viator]

It's no problem at all, I'm glad that I was able to have this conversation. And thank you, I hope that you'll enjoy my future poems!
Yes this place is amazing, I'm glad I found it.
-Harrisen

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Insightful. An excellent read and write.

[unsavable_soul]

Thanks Brandon.
I am glad that the feeling of enjoying each others work is a mutual one.
I am looking forward to a day here soon when I am just going to go through and review and enjoy the people I have been interacting with's collections of work, yours obviously among those.
Appreciatively
Chris

[Just Kim]

This is really good, love the flow.

[unsavable_soul]

I am glad you enjoyed it, I have only read one so far but I would easily say I look forward to reading more of your works.
Glad you liked it.
Chris

[dicey jones]

Just from your about me page on your profile one would already know you would be one heck of a writer... and sure you are. the flow, the rhymes, the thoughts, the unanswered questions makes one glued to this piece and possibly want more.

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you very much, I strive for something each time I write. I am glad you enjoyed it and I must say I am loving this place and the overall friendly and helpful faces I have met... you being one of them my friend.
Thanks for your appreciation.
Chris

[Southern Cross]

My thoughts are... I loved this piece. From beginning to the end it flowed and spoke of inner feelings that had to be said. Sometimes the unspoken words must be heard and this is a worthy piece.

[unsavable_soul]

Thank you very much and any pointers you have I am more than appreciative.
Sincerely
Chris