Hearts

quick little poem written after a test in psychology. :]

I'll breathe flames into your lungs,

Consume who you are;

Put all your pain

Straight in your heart

The aching relief

Like earthquakes in hell

Split open your soul

Where the darkness does dwell

As it pinches and burns,

The heartache increase

Leave you lifeless and broken

Beauty, the beast.

From once so loving

To ignorant thoughts,

Not thinking at all

Brought this panic along.

Stick to the truth or the safe lies

Because once it's believed

There is no place to hide

If thought to be gone

Or pushed far away,

Wait 'till the night

And here comes the pain

The hopeless romantic

Is hopeless indeed

Forgiveness and mercy this hurt doth not heed

Great judgement thrust out

From demons above

This heart is surrounded

No air, no life, no love.

Reviews

[vincentbals]

Powerful ... i liked it.

[St.Jimmy]

a really well written it has a good rhyme scheme and a brilliant flow
the poem conveys the emotions after a broken heart really well
Keep up the good job!
~Aaradhya

[EILEEN McGUINNESS]

Nice going kiddo

[amandamercer`xo]

this is really powerful, and good rhythm.
i loved it! good job.

[The Morbid The Merrier]

This is great and the rhyme flows very well. Good metaphors and transaction, with a lot if emotion in it too. Very powerful. Great job, I loved it.

-Sue

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like it its a wonderful poem.
Great Job

[Melissa Kesead]

Wonderful write! You carried such strong emotions through a varied course with wonderful rhyme!

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wow awesome write i like it a lot

[Céce]

Oh wow...a beautiful and heart-wrenching poem, with lovely rhymes and a smooth rhythm. You are certainly a poet!

Jane

[Song of Mercy]

Wow, awesome metaphore. I decended to hell to watch that soul rip apart. Powerful. You are a wonderful writer. Thanks for sharing. Barb