No title yet.. just random ramble...

Your heart blocks out my sun

Surrounded me in darkness

I have never known such love

It is a darker kind

 

I see your face curl with hunger

My feet want to run

But my body is froze

What have you done? 

Reviews

[EMF]

Pure Noire. Lust, love and darkness all combined. I'm jealous as hell. I write Noir. This is brilliant. Get the idea. It combines so many genre and themes in eight lines and lets your imagination run away with itself. Perfect. It needs no alteration. Only a title. If you think I'm being over infussive...I'm not

[Eagle Cruagh]

Your heart blocks out my sun :
Sounds like its time to run.,
I have never known such love:
You find it desirable.
I see your face curl with hunger:
Does he want you, or did he forget lunch.
My feet want to run:
But my body is froze: Froze ? Does that
mean you don`t have the will to flee ?
That would mean you want to stay and experience more.
What have you done ?
Perhaps he has just exposed you to new things
that you don`t want to give up. It may not be what
he has done as much as you want to stay with hiim
and experience this new freedom of choice.
Talk to him about it.
Nice poem showing the depth of emotion and desire
the writer is feeling . I would like to see more of
this type of writing. Lay it on the line so the reader
feels your pain.
------ Eagle Cruagh

[SpokenWord]

Part of me can see this as a positive love more taboo but the other part wonders if it is not safer to run. Blocking out the sun is kind of scary don't you think but for those into the darker love well it may just be heaven for them. It reminds me of that forbidden love that one knows is wrong but they just can't stay away from because it is so addictive.