Bite me and Die...

I begin to notice him everywhere I turn, this 1920’s shadow of a young man. I slowly begun to like that he was there, he was watching. No man has ever looked at me like him, passing hungry glances when he met my stare; setting my mind of into a wondrous haze. Strong urges seize my feelings, I wanted to know him. I wanted to know him more than anybody in my life.

I saw him one day, across the road from where I worked. and approached. "Hi" I said to him politely. 

But I got nothing back, just a glare and a glare so long and hard, my heart bleated harder through my chest. Say something. I thought. Please say something. 

 

"Hi" He replied. His voice was deep and strong, like nothing I heard before. It sent small vibrations through my skin.

 

“Are you new in town? I haven’t seen you around before” I bravely smiled. He was hard to read, looking so plain. But the eyes were saying different.

 

“Yeah just moved here, it’s quiet but I guess; I’ll get used to it”

 

“Oh, well maybe I can show you around, you do look a bit lost” I kept smiling, hoped it would crack that beautiful face of his and make me feel less stupid but nothing budge.

“I’ am lost if I’m to be honest” The corner of his mouth twitched.

 

“Though, it would be nice to been shown around, as I’ am to live here permanently”

 

I watched his mouth, almost going into a haze when he said permanently, my heart pounder harder at the thought.

“That’s great- I mean welcome to Chertsey”

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

or write from the characters POV... help!

Reviews

[EMF]

I liked the characters POV as is. The only thing that could use a bit of editing is the dialouge. Mainly to go for I am or I'm. Depends how relaxed you want the phraseology to be. It does just what a first chapter should though. Get me interested enough to want to read more.