It isn't you!

Song...

You never tried to find me, never held out your hand

I stood in the darkness and left with a broken mind

this fairy tale was meant to be ours

but instead this is a 'fucked' up ending...

 

why did you tie my hands with ribbon?

why tighten the pain that is already given?

Don't pretend your world is hurting too

One of us is dying inside and it isn't you,

it isn't you, No never had been you...

 

It isn't you, Oh, Oh, it isn't you 

No, it isn't you, never, ever, been you....

 

We could of been perfect, if we just held on

the sorry' couldn't cut it, sorry couldn't undo what went wrong

my heart has just stopped yet yours goes on beating

baby, one of us is dying inside and it isn't you,

it isn't you, no never had been you... 

 

It isn't you, Oh, Oh, it isn't you 

No, it isn't you, never, ever, been you....

 

No, no, never, been you. Oh, oh, Oh it isn't you...

baby One of us is dying inside and it isn't you..

Reviews

[John Faulkner]

Very sad piece..I can feel the anguish and heart break in your sorrowful words..WELL DONE< POETESS


JOHN

[Dream Weaver]

A helluva write and would enjoy hearing
it as a song...nicely done!

[Solitude]

This sounds so much like real life that it almost made me cry! Like your other reviewers, I could really imagine this as a song! I'm certain my teenage daughter would download this.

[SpokenWord]

It didn't work out between them, I must of missed a poem inbetween the this. Like real life the exotic often ends with one moving on to something else. It is sad because this person was really opening her up to new adventures and excitement. Sad ending to a good story. It could be sung like Chloe said as well. Beautiful write.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I love this .. do you have a way to sing it and post it?
I love these lyrics sounds a little punkish to me ..
Good lyrics, easy to understand and relate to.

Chloe

[Morning Star]

This is so touching and the emotions that your words capture are beautiful
I could see this piece as a song
The imagery is fantastic what can i say
LOVE IT !!

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[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh very nice lyrics... I could see them being sung by Joss Stone as a bluesy ballad.