Who are you?...

Who are you?...

A Poem by Stef Outsiders
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One of my dreams...

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I sit on my wooden porch
surrounded by tree's
if you listen 
they whisper in the breeze...

My eye's fall upon water
my very own lake
it's clear and fresh
perfect for dipping your toes...

Sat here in my chair
with my knee tight against my chest
looking out at the impossible
not wanting this scene to go...

then something erupts the water
I hear a noise
of a small boat coming this way
who? I wonder...

I rose from my seat
and leant against the rail
everything was a blur
even what was in view...

I could see the ripples
I could see its reflection
but not much of anything else...

Am I waking up
or is this how it would be?
when my eyes close
will ever I see who is in that boat?

My vision gets worst
as I watch this figure
climb onto my port
slowly
made there way to me...

They came upon my porch
blackness dimmed
"who are you?"
I whisper....

© 2011 Stef Outsiders


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Winsome wonderings...a nice suspension of belief, desire, and experience.

All blended by the longings of an willing heart...

Very well done...

Posted 13 Years Ago


the boat was in its way on the road of life
seeing u by that lake wasnt in mind
sorry for disturbing the scene which u dont it to go
boating is free so is other things u know


Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow. This is so graphic, the imagery is perfect. "My eye's fall upon water
my very own lake" is one of my favourite lines. So witty! It was a real pleasure to read this piece. Brilliant!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I just checked your writings since I haven't read any in a while :))
I'm glad I did
I lived this dream while reading this poem, very powerful imagery and well described throughout the whole piece
It really held my attention from the first few lines
wonderful write Stefanie :))

Posted 13 Years Ago


I loved the descriptive imagery within this poem and the flow and structure compliment eachother perfectly
this images that you create are strong and a feeling of nostalgia like an awaking moment towards the end makes me wish there was more to read
thank you for sharing this poem
100/100 from me

Posted 13 Years Ago


it make me think of poetic storie in a dream like state that in the end leaves me to ponder.
Excellent write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


'I sit on my wooden porch surrounded by tree's if you listen they whisper in the breeze...' that's such a beautiful opening to a poem. Nice use of words, imagery and build up.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Yes I agree with Timtim the build up of suspense was done like I was reading a book over reading a poem. Very good opening scene to a movie even. I like poets who can take a scene with only some one sitting on a porch and turn it into art. I have to say this was excellent poetry

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice suspense build up. It a great piece, because it keeps you expecting more, even at the end you anticipate the piece to continue. Nice write.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on February 23, 2011
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Stef Outsiders
Stef Outsiders

United Kingdom



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Hi everyone I am writer but still have a long way to go, have been writing for four years now, i like to read, love art, photography drawing and designing! I'm 26 years old, have two beautiful ch.. more..

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