Bad water

Bad water

an evil taste in my mouth

Bad water

 a demon filling up my lungs

Bad water

I can't even spit you out

Bad water

 leave pain taste on my tongue

Bad water

You're nothing sweet

Bad water

Once more, you've stop my heart from beating....

 

Author's Note

Ok another random poem, it just came to me... good or not i don't know.... Lol i was thinking of poison, but didn't want to use the word poison. If you get what i mean...

Reviews

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Interesting ... do you feel the taste of the poison ... sometimes its only too late when you do Yossi

[A]

That's good, bad water can mostly be anything that cause such feelings to all of us at different times, nice description.

[InkSlinger]

I found myself dwelling over this piece for a long lingering moment.. I think Cory said it best.. "it's going to crawl into whatever little nook and cranny it can find in the readers subconscious" and have a different meaning for everyone that reads it..

[Crowley]

Very creative way to express your point without using the word poison. I actually think that bad water can be construed in so many ways in this poem, its going to crawl into wahtever little nook and cranny it find in the readers subconsciuos that it will play out many different ways...its the hallmark of good poetry really. Nice work.

[Mauricio Montoya]

That’s cool to write things at random and you did a great job here putting this together because the first thing I thought when I read bad water was poison, now I always say this poetry is open to interpretation. So it would be interesting to see in what direction the reader goes with this write. Nice work.