Freight Train

A young man dies only to find out the universe is stranger than it seems.

Pilot Episode

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B5UNGmSp9IPHU0Q5T0k4c2ZjcjQ/view?usp=sharing

Episode 2

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B5UNGmSp9IPHMklKWVY1T3VxaGM/view?usp=sharing

Author's Note

I know I still have a lot to learn in the art of screenwriting, I'm looking for feedback on the story. ignore typo's and grammar problems.

Reviews

[David Jae]

The story work is excellent and you convey your ideas well. It would be well-received by any screenwriter.

Just one suggestion; when posting on Writer's Cafe, break it down into smaller chapters. It's a lot to read in one go.

You should be proud of this.

[Adam Wieherdt]

Thanks so much for your kind words. I struggle getting the images from my head onto paper and feeling like it does a well enough job conveying what I see.

[David Jae]

It does. You should be pleased with what you've achieved.