Emotional Bill

Good poem and the title will do

i trusted you.

 you didnt trust me.

 that is why it wasnt meant to be.

 for now Ill just stay free.

 but.

 freedom is just some people talking.

 without love we are just halves walking.

 in the shadows we are stalking.

 when light hits us we stand gawking.

 but.

 the light of another is our goal.

 and the feelings we cannot control.

 sometimes we go deeper into our hole.

 sometimes we comeout because we want to know.

 but.

 to be loved is just a want.

we dont need the taunt..

 

 we can go on without.

 and still we come out..

 

 we want love to come and play.

 and when it does we want it to stay..

 

 sometimes it will

 or you pay an emotional bill.

Author's Note

Emotional bill is the sadness, hurt, and moving on part when it's over. Also thanks for the name suggestions. I'll use this one.

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Love the metaphores used! Amazing, very well written and bittersweet, happy, yet broken, yet the ending makes me laugh. Nice flow and rhymes used, a great poem of yours.

[Fréyjä Helv..]

nice work... how u played with metaphors, pretty good. It flowed really well... :)

[Jordan A. Wilson]

Your style is unique and a joy to read, man. Keep on keepin' on

[♥ Lexii Boo &hea..]

LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!! but then again i pretty much love all of your work your very talented great write

[mariah]

interesting poem. i like the comparisons, i have never thought of it in that way. which is great, poems should open peoples minds and give them new perspectives. awesome write! :P
-Mariah

[nigrum homonculus]

pretty creative there. i love the style you wrote it in and the simplicity of the words. as for suggestions....what racheal said. emotional bill sounds fitting

[Emrys Realmskip]

Beautiful piece!

[afra]

Ah I just love dis piece totally my type ......... Keep writing

[RachelReaper]

I liked the way you creatively rhymed the words. As for suggestions... not to state the obvious, but "Emotional Bill"? That's all that's coming to mind at the moment. Anyways, I really liked it, though it is sad.

[T. Logan]

You could just call this 'Freedom'. 'Separation' would work to, though they're both total opposites. Either one works. It almost sets a scene. Which is good. You write darker poetry though, don't you?