HALO

Work in progress, what ya think?

the pelican flies.

 the banshee cries.

 the scorpion tries.

 and the wraith dies.

Author's Note

Work in progress.

Reviews

[nigrum homonculus]

from gamer to gamer....you're on the right track but remember, halo has been brutal sci-fi combat with hoards of aliens wanting to kick your a*s, huge set pieces and ridiculous weaponry. capture that and my friend you will have made a classic. if you need any help with it tell me...i would actually love to help with this

[Laura Maidah]

It might do with an expansion. It's that good. Neat. Precise. Concise. Great little thing. I just wish it were longer, you know? I don't get the title. PM me, please. Why "Halo"?

[SHEEMA HUQ]

the finished poem need not rhyme, need it....sounds fresh and promising thus far...