You say no

You say no

A Poem by Harley (arbiter)
"

Rejection sucks

"

it would work but you do not see.

 you shoot me down with no sympathy.

 is there anouther flame.  

 playing this game.

 i say yes and you say no.

 you said you were different but thats getting old.  

 ive heard it before ill hear it again.

 thats all ill hear until my end.  

 a chance is all im asking and one ill never recieve.

  love was not meant for me i should  leave.

 were still friends this is true.

  but its not the same because i like you.  

stop quit move on leave it alone.  

 your words sting me to the bone.

 ill just live a life of pain.

 for bitterness and hurt is all i gain.  

 im done with love i could care less anymore.

 unless there is a day when you knock on my door.  

  but you say and i fear.    

 that that day will never get here

© 2012 Harley (arbiter)


Author's Note

Harley (arbiter)
Sorry but I'm on a phone that doesn't agree with the text box for writing this stuff. That's why it looks kinda wierd
found a computer should look a little better yay
mabie its just my computer but i dont know why move on is a link to a apartment site, i didnt put it there so sorry but it may just be my computer i dont know

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This was good, nice job

Posted 11 Years Ago


Awesome! I mean, the topic isn't awesome, because rejection DOES suck, but... y'know what I mean.

Brilliantly written, a stellar piece. Well done, Harley.

Posted 12 Years Ago


like, like alot :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Harley (arbiter)

12 Years Ago

Thanks! Always glad to hear that!
Colleen a Bean

12 Years Ago

lol it feels great doesn't it haha
You made me think of:

"Breaking Up is Hard To Do by Neil Sedaka"

Do you know oldies THAT old Harwee? =)

"don't say that this is the end,
instead of breaking up
i wish that we were making up again."

"i beg of you, don't say goodbye
can't we give our love another try."

"come on baby
let's start anew
cuz breaking up
is hard to do."

I'm posting this on your profile! =)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Harley (arbiter)

12 Years Ago

Yeah I've heard that!
Jeanette

12 Years Ago

Yay! =)
This was really touching and open hearted. The rhyme was amazing and everything was so easy to read and the flow was fantastic. I loved every bit of it. My favorite lines from your poem were
"i say yes and you say no.
you said you were different but thats getting old.
ive heard it before ill hear it again.
thats all ill hear until my end."
I love how you are such a loyal friend even when you are in pain. Beautifully worded.
-Courage

Posted 12 Years Ago


Rejection does suck. Hope it gets better. :/ Anyway i love the write! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, well worded and nicely said. The emotion seems to just flow through the lines and seep out into the open. The poem is easy to connect with, and the pain of rejection, yet still friends, is a harsh one. (I know). Good writing! Keep going! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Even through the phone, the message is quite clear. The emotion related to by anyone, everyone, as we all have had this feeling of our love being unrequited. the pain, the sting, depicted very honestly here as if it just happened to you.
Very nice.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on June 4, 2012
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Tags: rejection, no, love, hurt, pain, heart, fear

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Harley (arbiter)
Harley (arbiter)

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I am different. I am the unforgiven. I was born october 1997. I just write because I want to express my feelings in more ways than music and art. I'm just a guy trying to get out of the rain and sur.. more..

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