Bully

i was going to school. listening to the classic rock station here. bully by shinedown came on. i had no idea what it was but loved the song. i looked it up after school. what it was doing on a CLASSIC rock station i have no idea but im glad it was. it inspired this. this poem isnt that good but i like it. thoughts?

Author's Note

When I was younger I walked away
But now when I see a bully
I try to stop the fiend
And I don't know why
But they're scared of me
I've grown stronger from ROTC
And now I hope they see
The pain these kids go through
So much that its nothing new
They bruise
Black and blue
For nothing but being themselves
For whom does toll the bells
When their time is here
The bullies will be filled with fear
When they die
No-one will cry
All they're ever be
Is a faded memory
Of a bully
The scars they leave
That the victims heave
Is all that's left behind
From that cruel bind
That was the bully
Now all that they see
Is the faded memory
And they thank me
A bully is why
So many people cry
And so many die
The prick makes a joke
And that kid hangs the rope
Its a sad life
Filled with strife
They need a hero or a saint
That will drive away the taint
So why do you walk away
Like you didn't see it all
You do it everyday
You saw that kid fall
From the blow
He said he had a tripp
But you know
He was hit
You still don't say a thing
Don't you feel that sting
Its you being guilty
Why don't you rise
Make the prick face his lies
Fight the bully
Start saving lives
Don't sit and be guilty

Reviews

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I love this poem. This is great. Nice easy flow and very realistic. Great write!

[Harley (arbiter)]

thanks

[LittleLover]

I really like this poem, this doesn't really happen in our school, and if it does teachers always see and theres those few students who always stick up for the victims. Being a victim of 2 years myself i know how it feels when someone stands up, its pretty awesome. And it sucks that people don't as often as they should.
back to the poem lol
Its great, simply great.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you

[LittleLover]

No problemo

[lee von cleef]

As Chris would say" Strong",and me I would try to write a review to compliment your words,but just get lost or misunderstood ,I asked Emily to get a guitar,I think you need one too,this has song,a deep base line, to bring forth a lead,yes buy a guitar,to compliment your poem, you don't need me ,this is good.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I want to learn guitar and I probably will get one one day. Thanks for the review

[lee von cleef]

Now,don't let life slip slide away,time is ,present,now is good.

[Aysia]

I love this. Purely amazing.

[Harley (arbiter)]

thank you

[captain]

i understand what you feel, i also feel the same seeing the bully treated the weak. I like it!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you

[Calibaster]

that was good. great organization!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you

[SHEEMA HUQ]

I think you have tackled this very hard hitting issue very powerfully, with an effecive proces of stong, descriptive sentiments, thanks

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you for reading

[Crimson Bayonet]

I can't say anything other than it is amazing. Your words are filled with the truth, not the lies that come out of the bully's bitter mouth. Fantastic job! :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks

[Blue Ivory]

Your words could not be truer :) I'm glad you're taking a stand against bullying. It's the age-old torment that we have ALL been through. Your words have impact. This is very mature writing. Great job!

[Harley (arbiter)]

thank you

[afra]

wow amazing ..i love every single line of it ....well done

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you