My mentor told me that it looks best to actually write out all numbers under twenty. So I would chan.. read moreMy mentor told me that it looks best to actually write out all numbers under twenty. So I would change 6 to six. And in the very end Gods should be God's. That's it, I think :)
Wow. I have a little sister that I would lay my life down for. She even convinced me to not cut once when I was seriously considering it. When I read this, I wondered what it would be like if I hadn't met her. I was almost moved to tears. And I hardly EVER cry!!! :(
This is a great poem and it takes a lot to write something like this. I write about my ordeals, but they are disguised in the plot of my books. You are a lot braver than I am. :)
Wow this is a very special poem...It's tragic that something like this has happened to you. I can't imagine what that must've been like for your parents, or what it's like living with the knowledge of something like this. Good job.
I like the straight-forward nature of your poetry.
(A pet peeve of mine is poetry that thinks it's better than it is, which this thankfully is not.)
I like it.
Well Done.
I am different. I am the unforgiven. I was born october 1997. I just write because I want to express my feelings in more ways than music and art. I'm just a guy trying to get out of the rain and sur.. more..