Greatist Fear

Thanks for the name sugestion afra!

yeah i think im losing my touch. my poems arent really that good as some of my older ones. eh idk but yeah this one means alot to me

Author's Note

She likes the bad boys
And ones coming

When he gets here
My love will mean nothing

Ill be just a friend again
And she'll be with him

And it'll hurt
To watch that film

But no matter what I do
I couldn't get her back

No matter how much I try
I will always lack

That one trait
She wants more

Ill always be standing
Outside the door

So I pray to god
He doesn't get here

Because losing her
Is my greatist fear

Reviews

[Mariah Corey]

wow, it is truly remarkable. i l love thte emotion, you always know how to fit your emotions into say the words. Its amazing. :D

[A. V. Madison]

So emotional, so perfect. I totally love it! 100/100.

[Timeless-Chan]

Aw:( its so painful...
great write tho^_^
~Dreamer!

[Forever Hidden]

Feeling the Pain

Stunning! ^-.-^

[Aehr]

okay, awesome poem! Emotions can be felt by the reader. Name...
1. Losing Her
2. Outside the Door Again
3. If He Gets Here...

I'm not good at these!!! :P but awesome poem, and I hope things go well :)

[gloomysundays]

I can really feel the emotion behind the poem. The hurt, the pain. You convey feelings extremely well but the fact that your grammar needs improvement really bothers the flow of it.
Apostrophes should be your best friend. Aside from the grammar, you need to keep a firm hand on your present/past/future tenses. For example: "And it'll hurt" = Future. "She likes the bad boys And ones coming" = Present. "I couldn't get her back" = Past.
I know it's easy to lose track, especially during writing but make sure to always revise and edit your work. Keep writing. You're a great poet.

75/100
Cheers.

[That_Girl]

"Fear Stitched In Fate".... "Fate Stitched In Fear".... idk... I'm tired.. and horrible at this.. lol

Really like the poem! Give yourself a little more credit. :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks though! Every suggestion helps. Lol. And eh

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

This is amazing! I love it!
I like the rhythm and flow of words.
Remarkable work ^_^
100/100

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks

[Freedom's Child]

Great poem, I love the lines " And it'll hurt to watch that film". Great flow as well. As for a name maybe "my beautiful mirage" really not sure though.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks! I'm writing down all suggestions for consideration. Thanks again

[Forgotten]

This is a really sad yet sweet poem, I don't think you need to worry, this was extremely good :)

[Forgotten]

Oh also how about 'A fear Sincere' just a suggestion.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I'm writing down all the suggestions. Thanks! And for the review