highway run

It just came to me

this. just... came to me. inspired by so many things. so many thoughts going through my mind all at once. this is what came out of them all. i think it needs something to close it off but i dont know. also when i was writing it, a few songs were going through my head. it kinda reads to the melody of them. both by journey "faithfully" and "whos crying now"

Author's Note

Highway run
The pain has just begun
And they think I'm having fun

The years go on and on
And I think of history
That old part of me
That is gone

You see laughter
But never the pain
I push the tears back down again
Inside its safer

And I run
From the pain that's just begun
But I'm never having fun

Old friends come and gone
It never lasts very long
I don't know what ill do
If I ever have to leave you

I guess ill run
From the pain that's just begun
And I'm never having fun
When I'm without you

We all need that someone
To be with us till we're gone
And to take us when we're done
To the place that we belong

Just a highway run
From the pain that's just begun
Never having fun
Searching for someone

I wanted to get away
Lonliness; the price to pay
And until that fatefull day
I just can't stay

Highway run
Pain that's just begun
I run round and round looking for someone
And I run
From the pain that's just begun
And I'm never having fun
I can't find that one

Reviews

[That_Girl]

I agree with Dr. Wood... I think that would be a good closing line. The song is really strong and well written. Keep it up! You're getting better and better.

[Pól]

Very musical. I like the repetition of the central messages . Some band should cover this.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I might simply add 'Just a Highway run.' on the end...It reads more as a lyric than a poem and if you were inspired by some other songs that is fine. It is how we all work really...Inspiration takes many forms

[T. Logan]

I really like this. And I don't know where you got the picture for this, but I love that too. I like pretty much everything about this actually.

[Mariah Corey]

i luv it, the emotions flow off the page so beautifully, i luv the words "I guess ill run
From the pain that's just begun
And I'm never having fun
When I'm without you

We all need that someone
To be with us till we're gone
And to take us when we're done
To the place that we belong"
ur writing rocks. :D

[Freedom's Child]

Incredible flow that is so fitting with the piece. I would not add to the ending, I think it is appropriate not to have a conclusion being the context of running. Just me but I would maybe change "old friends come and gone" only because it is used so often. Great piece with great emotion!

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

I enjoyed this amazing poem. The rhythm is great and the scheme is amazing.
My favorite line was " You see laughter, But never the pain" amazing line.
You did a magnificent job on this poem.
100/100

[The Analog Kid]

The repetition works well on this one. Great way to riff off one line from a song. That's the way to do it:)

[afra]

i loved the second stanza ...and overall the poem was good ....i think this is one of ur best work ...well done

[Harley (arbiter)]

thanks

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I really like how it all kind if fitted together. Most poems have little parts, where they get off topic or it just doesn't match the rest of the piece, but every thing in this song is perfect, well written, and flows with ease. Definitely one of your best. Excellent work!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks