cities on flame with my soul

Parody of blue oyster cult's "cities on flame with rock and roll"

My heart is black
And my lips are cold
Cities on flame
With my soul

3 thousand mortars
They seem to fire
My heart will melt
And then ill cry

So let the bombs
Let them bombs
Hit and explode
Because pain and hurt
Is all I know

Gardens of flowers
Pretty in the light
Just a burning field
In the night

Cities on flame
With my soul
Watch my anger
Burn out of control

So let the bomb
let them bombs
rain down on my soul
cause pain and hurt
is all i know

Author's Note

Not done yet

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

yes, I do like the song. Rock and Roll nation!

[Harley (arbiter)]

thank you for reviewing this! It reminded me I need to put up the finished one! :D thanks!

[Laura Maidah]

So it sounds like this speaker knows pain. maybe the mood is nice and strong, but the meaning is weak because I have no idea what happened to the poor guy. Guy/girl. All i know is life sucks and the narrator oughtta die or kill himself/herself

[SHEEMA HUQ]

extreme - concise

[Erika Jones]

This one had a lot of anger .___. But great all the same!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank yooou! ^_^

[Skia1717]

That's really good. :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

thanks

[Mazie Tackett]

nice i really i like this one

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks

[Mazie Tackett]

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[Freckled Princess]

Flows nicely as a song. It's an inspiration! (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice beginning for the song. I look forward to see where you are taking this song. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you for the review!

[Dr. Wood ?]

make a good song lyric...go out and buy a guitar

[Harley (arbiter)]

Would if I could :D

[Mariah Corey]

I like how u gave the reader a clear image of what you were trying describe and i luv it how u write.