Over

sigh

time doesn't heal wounds

youre brain forgets they're there

until you are reminded

of how much you still care

 

I thought

but I'm not

over you

It's sad but true

 

tried to find someone new

and forget about you

but I love you girl

you're my world

 

you're me sweetie

my cherry pie

I was youre savior

I was youre guy

 

story I heard till the day I met you

story I'll hear till the day I die

try to move on but I can not forget you

you said you loved me but that was a lie

 

you said it's ok

that you forgave me

but we can't be

you and I

oh how I wish you were still mine

 

I still ask myself why

why am I lonely

why do I cry

you were the only

I was the guy

 

if you could just see

what happened to me

you didn't see the tear I cried

you said you wouldn't hurt me

but you lied

 

it wasn't me

who hurt you

I have the effort

to show you it's true

 

you don't talk to me

what can I do

I should've known better

to give myself over to you

 

I'm regreting

ever letting

you slip out of my life

I was thinking of you for my wife

 

if you would let me

say I'm sorry

and truly give me

one last shot

 

I swear I'll do better

and I don't lie

can't you see

how hard I fight

 

living without you isn't a life

and that's why I try

thats why I cry

I want to have you

but you want me to die

 

S

 

Author's Note

I wrote this a while ago

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

Emotion when its most raw, most real. The lines that rhyme flow and I clearly see what you are describing. Excellent job (as always). Keep up the awesome work.... however, I am truly sorry you lost her. A word of advice: when you hand someone your heart, make sure they give you there's too. It's just something I've come to realize over the years.

[Harley (arbiter)]

She said she did too. Were all fools at one point I guess. Thanks

[Jeanette]

Fall For You - Secondhand Serenade

[afra]

awwww so touchy .....i can relate a lot with this poem ...hope you feel better soon ....good job

[T. Logan]

aside from a few grammar errors (you're or your.... I'm a grammar nazi.), this was really good! It's sad, because it's something most of humanity can relate to.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I'll get on that when I can thanks

[mariah]

:) beautiful and yet so sad. the emotion runs thick in this poem! now, im not great at poems but i know one thing; if you can make people feel emotions as they read, your doing something right lol! nice job, i love it!
-mariah

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thanks so much

[mariah]

your welcome! :P

[Owlgirl]

Wow, great job, beautifully written with raw pain and emotion. Awesome job :)

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you. It seems I have accomplished my goal of putting in emotion

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

So sad. This emotion in this is stunning- so true, so honest. Pure. Excellent work, Harley.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I thank you

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Not a problem, friend. I'm sorry you feel this way and have to deal with this.

[Harley (arbiter)]

Don't be. Nothing you can do and it wasn't you're fault friend. It's OK. Thanks.: )

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

:) You're welcome

[That_Girl]

"their there" should be "they're there"

This was so sweet and sentimental. The reader can truly feel the pain expressed! Wonderful job.

[Harley (arbiter)]

I shall fix it ASAP thanks!

[Harley (arbiter)]

it is fixed!!

[That_Girl]

:) Awesome! Great job hun!

[Aehr]

aww.. this is so heartfelt! Its straight from your heart, and the reader can feel it. Its beautifully done. The emotions, the flow, its.. flawless! I really love it. The pain can be felt through your words. I love what you've done here... I don't know how to say how much I love this poem... its wonderful...
Okay, honestly I do go crazy in detail when I really love a piece of writing... Beautifully sketched...

Gotta shelve it!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Thank you. I really tried with this one. Put a lot of emotion into it and I'm glad it came out right. Thanks

[Aehr]

It was a pleasure reviewing this one... Was this about something which actually happened? Anyway, i loved it!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Yes. I mostly write from experience. Thanks

[Aehr]

Welcome!