The Parting Soul

The Parting Soul

A Poem by unfathomd
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I came up with this after listening to TheMercifulServant. How does it feel.. Death?

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The Parting Soul - unfathomd
What if I told you that your body,
is nothing more than a garland,
that you wear around like a garment
that screens the confining darkness
and liberates them, as black clouds
which pepper your mind with dark thoughts.

Yes, we call ourselves human beings,
who are made out of dust, for the time being.
The form that you are seeing,
is a reflection from a mirror in which you are dreaming.
Its not the dream that you see while you are sleeping,
but when you are awake, alive and breathing.

What if I told you that it takes only one millionth of a second,
to slip into the dark numbness of the moment.
The impending whisper of death,
that is imminent after every passing breath.

With that final sigh, you are marked by your deeds and devotion,
which adheres you to your loved ones' emotion,
and extricates you, from your daily commotion
As oblivion seeps through, while you are frigid and frozen.

© 2016 unfathomd


Author's Note

unfathomd
Hello there :) Didn't take much time to write this, the theme is a bit dark but I dunno why I came up with this :

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Powerful and true words.
"What if I told you that it takes only one millionth of a second,
to slip into the dark numbness of the moment.
The impending whisper of death,
that is imminent after every passing breath."
The above lines are non-fiction. Easy to kill, easy to die. Harder to stay alive. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Yes life it self is very mysterious and tender. We can explore and find out. We can see who we realy are. I think this poem help me at my own exploration. So thank you very much.

Posted 7 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Life is indeed mysterious.. its joyful, tiring, sometimes...boring.. but yeah.. at the end of the da.. read more
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7 Years Ago

you wellcme it s realy good poem
Unfanthomd,
Your tone is a bit dark but you bring about some interesting looks at life and death.You used solid descriptions to show your thoughts. Your writing style has improved and you are making strides in the maturity of your work.
Richie b.

Posted 7 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Experience is the best teacher they say :) Initially when we start writing we are under the impressi.. read more
i like it !
What if I told you that your body,
is nothing more than a garland,
that you wear around like a garment
that screens the confining darkness
and liberates them, as black clouds
which pepper your mind with dark thoughts.
the starting is awsome !!
great job


Posted 8 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Thank you zunie :)
zunie frost

7 Years Ago

welcome !!
This was very good!! i enjoyed this much!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot S.A.P :D :D
Hi Unfathomd,
Your work is captivating i love it .

Posted 8 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Thank You diana :)
Really very nice....good luck


Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow..very finely depicted the truth of a human...that we are mere humans nothing is permanent so stop believing in difference coz everyone's got ta go in a same way

Posted 8 Years Ago


unfathomd

7 Years Ago

Truee! :) exactly what I wanted to convey.. :) Thanks for the review
Nice work.. your philosophy of this poem is great. you really pointed out the truth.

Posted 8 Years Ago


unfathomd

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Pallab :) for the review
Pallab

8 Years Ago

you're welcome

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Added on October 3, 2016
Last Updated on October 3, 2016
Tags: Death, Slice of Life, Wisdom, Reality, Emotion, Gloom

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