A Sense of Life

This is the way I see life. Everyone has got a different opinion. So, I don't say that mine is the right one. No I don't. :)

SENSE OF LIFE - unfathomd

In this small square room of mental illusion,

I look at my reflection in a state of desolation.

I'm not what I am in this state of confusion,

I'm trampled on the ground by my sense of delusion.

I'm a black-hole in the corner of one of my classes,

absorbing all hatred and negativity that passes.

I see no light, nor a glimmer of hope,

what I haven't learnt is the courage to cope.

I need contraceptives for my mind.

Can't bear this cynicism and broken lies.

My thoughts are sown with verbal abuses,

raised by water like the weeds on turf-grasses.

Solitude was my belief in transient relief.

Its not a permanent cure, but just a relief.

When I snap out of it, I'm in the very same shoes,

I'm leached out of my strength, from out of the blue.

Escape from reality has never been an option.

Blacking out on drugs have never been a solution.

The past three years, I have witnessed huge losses,

instead of the results, now I discern the causes.

It might not just be mine, but your life too,

But what the wise men say, is indeed true -

Your deep sense of hurt, builds up your power,

because what doesn't kill you, makes you stronger...

Author's Note

There are lots of errors due to my limited knowledge, I cant find them all... so, do point them out :) Thank you :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right my friend.
"Your deep sense of hurt, builds up your power,
because what doesn't kill you, makes you stronger..."
The above lines are true logic. Bad days make the good days better. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

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It s look to me. Your poetry reflect your thinking about life . And meaning why you are here. Very rare to read this kind of thinking. You give me lot of inspirations. And form what you use have beauty on the own. So again thank you

[unfathomd]

I'm just a 19 year old. You are certainly older than me. When someone says that its an inspiration.. Its a great honour. :)

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well i dont think age matter. sometimes people are old and they are totaly empty without any experience. And some young people can have quiet lot inside and this poem for sure have something inside

[shyla]

"Solitude was my belief in transient relief.
Its not a permanent cure, but just a relief.
When I snap out of it, I'm in the very same shoes," this part of your poem rang true for some of my emotions ive felt before to read that someone else could feel that way brings light to a dark tunnel ive been stuck in... a great piece

[unfathomd]

To some extent I feel that we all go through the same emotions at some point. After all, we are just different threads of the same fabric. Thank you shyla for the review :)

[andrew mitchell]

Funny how choices can either make us or break us. A good piece of writing.

[unfathomd]

Thank you :) :)

[Jade]

this is really good you write really well

[unfathomd]

ohhh! :D thanks a lot odd girl :) :)

[LazerRays]

I LOVED THIS!!! I don't know how, but its soooo good, I've read this 13 times already!!

[unfathomd]

Whoa!! thanks a lot ! xD Well.. I dunno if I have read it 13 times ;) flattery? ;) jkin :D :D

[I Am Svetlana]

I honestly see no errors within this piece, but I am introduced to a strong heart. What doesn't kill you indeed makes you stronger because you learn to cope & move on from past mistakes. We all live in the dark corners of our minds, but I really admired what you wrote here. It may be dark, but it holds much honesty. It holds no guilt though, which is comforting that you don't blame yourself for how you feel. It's okay to have a dark mind, but it comes in handy for writing cause you can turn the darkness into growth and positive thoughts! Thanks for sharing. I also enjoyed the imagery within this & the rhyming. It really made this come together well.

[unfathomd]

They say truth is bitter but sometimes you've got to speak up :) Thanks for the review Svetlana :D

[Karmee]

WOW!! NOW this is what I call a write,
Very amazing, I loved your last stanza the most.
Deep and much involved feelings, Nicely expressed.
Keep writing always, but for now I will be putting this as a fave.
Awesome job!!!

[unfathomd]

Oh! thanks a lot Myconcern. :) Last stanza, well the wise men that I'm talking about is myself and joker(batman) ;) Im not wise btw.. Just wanted to give the last push ;)

[Ruth]

Wise piece :) We do seem to learn from the pain and even though times can weigh and almost destroy, the human heart seems stronger than thought in coping and evolving. Nice to meet you unfathomd :)

[unfathomd]

Thank You Poppy for the review :) I found one of your writings on the top. Hence it would be much better if I say that its nice to meet YOU :) :)