My Story

autobiographical? confessional?? call it whatever you want :D

This Is My Story - by Unfathomd.

When I was a kid, I believed in myths,

Today, I think of those days I missed.

I believed in ghosts, I believed in ghouls,

No matter, how bright the day shined,

I still needed light.

Was there a time I kept my tooth,

Under the pillow in search of truth.

Things that I had heard of the tooth fairy,

who'd exchange for gifts that were lovely.

Time passed and I started to grow,

Life taught me lessons I need to know.

Some were cool, while some were a blow,

I learnt not much, during that show.

Again, time took me to my teenage years,

That was the time of my cheers and tears.

I started questioning the things around me,

Wanted to break the chains that bound me.

Sixteen, I started giving thought to my looks,

and stopped attending to my school textbooks.

It was not surprising that my grades were abyss,

because I lived more on that celestial bliss.

Now, I'm eighteen and I guess I'm different,

no more am I fascinated with the distant.

I dunno whether time would teach me more,

Because no one knows, what it has in store.

Author's Note

:) :D rea and review.. i havent used compicated metaphysics or language, Ive tried to make it as frank and simple as possible

Reviews

[Krizito]

"Started giving thought to my looks and stopped attending to my school textbooks.....because I lived more on that celestial bliss";one of the many lines that got me thinking. You made a great piece friend and thanks for the simple language, it helped a lot.

[unfathomd]

You r welcome :) thnx fr d review

[JokerforLife]

Thirty Yoz
Wow!!! Look at tht..everytime u write somethin..it keeps gettin better...tht was classy!!! Great one bro..keep writing.. U made it clear about ur life..i wud hav appreciated if it had been a bit long..i mean it was a perfect thing..felt it ended quite soon

[Anindita Janhabee]

Very nice poem my friend... All the words here are simple yet grossing... Keep on writing and try to extend your business of writing...

[unfathomd]

Sure I will..thnks fr reviewin anindita :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

You hv penned honestly, that's what I loved about this poem....

[KingDavid]

Expressive words that bring out the feeling buried deep within, a truly remarkable piece. Once again. You have taken me inside your heart with your poem. Good job.

[unfathomd]

Thank you sir, for those words..I sense a lot of humility 😎 ur no less either ;)

[KingDavid]

You're much welcome, kind sir :3

[Southern_Writes]

"Wanted to break every chains that bound me."
To
Wanted to break the chains that bound me.

Coz I lived more on that celestial bliss.
Change it to because, instead of coz.

Other then that, of is quite nice. The flow is good and allows the reader to peer into the meat of the passage.

[unfathomd]

Yeeeee! Ill surely keep tht in mind..i told I'm a zero when it comes to grammar! ;) thanks fr d review Kansas :)

[jesserose99]

This is good...a nice overview on how you have seen your life. Very interesting. I wouldn't worry to much about grammar when you are just trying to express yourself. I like that you aren't focusing on the distant anymore but what it has in store...it is a very grounded approach to life. Nice write. Don't forget to ponder the universe now and then though...lol :)

[unfathomd]

Lol!! Sure! I actually meant somethin else but yea its fine as long as no one complains ;) to b frank..im still pondering ;) btw, Thanks fr d review.. :)

[jesserose99]

let me know how I get confused...I really like to have a clear depiction of what you are thinking...I want to reread and understand the right way..lol

[unfathomd]

maybe ill write another soon enough I guess id b elaborating emotions on that ;)

[jesserose99]

all right, fair enough....lol