dear beloved, i wrote a letter to you
through this weathered time, the few things i never said
abiding in the hoax of seeing you again
tears down my neck, oh how could i forget
amidst everything we see, a fine line weaves,
where yearnings and reality dance like autumn leaves
lurking in the cascades of chaos,
your voice is still the one i hear.
And i still look for you to find what's real
every time i think of you, a little more i heal
u've been like the light in the midst of strife
And i hope i'll say this to you in some other life
Might i have been the one to calm the storm
Might i have been the one to keep you warm
Might i have been the one to light your way
Would you have stayed?
Would you have been ok?
Would you?
Silently, i scream out loud in this hue,
all the things i never said,
the things that fill me with dread.
So, i'll keep writing even if you're gone,
hoping you'll get my message from the blue.
Oh dear beloved, i wrote a letter to u,
hoping that it will find its way through.
thanks for the read request, grace. enjoyed the read.
my version:
everytime i think of you i drown
unable to go for the kill
knowing fully well this could be our last run-down
you didn't let me in
your cloak so here i am
standing outside like a clown
but i'm still here
waiting for you
to unpiece the pieces of you
that you choose to hide under your shawl
Posted 10 Months Ago
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10 Months Ago
I really appreciate you for taking part in this! These words are so beautiful and i just can feel th.. read moreI really appreciate you for taking part in this! These words are so beautiful and i just can feel them. They fully have the essence of what i tried to write down in my poem. Thank you so much.
10 Months Ago
I was thinking: Each time you cross my mind, I find myself submerged,
Incapable of taking de.. read moreI was thinking: Each time you cross my mind, I find myself submerged,
Incapable of taking decisive action,
Aware that this might be our final downfall.
You barred me entry,
Your concealment leaving me exposed,
I linger outside, resembling a fool.
Yet, I persist,
Patiently awaiting your embrace,
Yearning for you to reveal the fragments of yourself,
Concealed beneath the shelter of your shawl.
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10 Months Ago
These are so beautiful and you made it even better! I am so thankful for you to take part in this. I.. read moreThese are so beautiful and you made it even better! I am so thankful for you to take part in this. I wish i could just pin this to come and read it whenever i want to.
10 Months Ago
i beg to differ with "you made it even better", grace. while i do acknowledge that they did a good j.. read morei beg to differ with "you made it even better", grace. while i do acknowledge that they did a good job expressing what i expressed in a more refined way that most people can resonate with, except me :p. but one thing is missing, and that's what i value most: the fun part, which is conveying things in an unusual way. i like that: concealed beneath the shelter of your shawl.
Yo, gotta say, your "made it even better" vibe, Grace, it's cool and all. They nailed expressing wha.. read moreYo, gotta say, your "made it even better" vibe, Grace, it's cool and all. They nailed expressing what I spat out, all classy and relatable for the masses, except yours truly, haha. But here's the sitch, something's missing, and what I vibe with most is the fun factor, you feel me? Like, spicing things up with a twist. I'm all about that: hiding stuff beneath the cozy vibes of your shawl, you know?
10 Months Ago
I didn't mean that you made a blade of grass versions better. Everyone's way of conveying things is .. read moreI didn't mean that you made a blade of grass versions better. Everyone's way of conveying things is different and i respect both of you for that. What i meant is by being the part of this, you both made this whole thing better! So thank you for that.
10 Months Ago
I am okay. Sorry. I was writing another poem I just posted. Thank you so very much for texting. .. read moreI am okay. Sorry. I was writing another poem I just posted. Thank you so very much for texting. I love it so much to reach out to others that write.
There are a lot of mixed emotions when someone's no longer here with us. Or no longer willing to remain in our lives. You convey a tone of hurt, but also of compassion tinged with regret. It calls to mind the scenario that comes up when we wish we had just 5 more minutes with someone who passed on. 5 minutes to do what, though. To laugh? Cry? To share sentiments we were too foolish to share in the moment? Good work, Grace. Thank you for sharing.
Dear Grace
This is a very sensitive, personal word...you words convey a feeling of loss, yet you desire something to grasp onto, even though you know it is for naught...perhaps it comforts you to keep writing letters in an apologetic tone.. like maybe you could have done more to replenish the relationship...I feel as if there may be some self blame in this correspondence...your words really give the reader a clear understanding that something is very wrong... very well written...
Warmly, B
dearest Grace.. I see the Face of your Beloved and out of the Blue… there will be ❤️ Love.. my friend. Pat
Posted 9 Months Ago
9 Months Ago
I'm sorry i didn't get what you mean.. can u say it again?
Also thank you so much for readin.. read moreI'm sorry i didn't get what you mean.. can u say it again?
Also thank you so much for reading my poem, dear Pat. It means a lot :)
Dear grace. I still write letters to people. So long gone from my life.
"Oh dear beloved, i wrote a letter to u,
hoping that it will find its way through."
Us, who love to write. We make our lovers, immortal in story and poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Months Ago
9 Months Ago
It feels really nice to know that you still write letters to people long gone from ur life. Because .. read moreIt feels really nice to know that you still write letters to people long gone from ur life. Because i do, too, and it really helps sometimes. Thank you so much for reading my poem! I'm glad you liked it.
' your voice is still the one i hear. ' Perhaps that is what matters, knowing whether or not the sounds, the nuances, were sincere or thought of in that way. Can only guess that something happened, that's still remembered - will never be forgotten. nothing. But there are people who stay together in different ways .. if meant to. Otherwise one or other or both limp(s) along, getting nowhere. Here you write with a sweet and sincere tone. Bless you, grace.
Your first stanza is beautiful.
Posted 9 Months Ago
9 Months Ago
This is an amazing review! Thank you so much for reading my poem! I'm glad u liked it.
We can't live in guilt blaming ourselves for the actions or inactions of others. Everything is a choice and there's always a crossroad at the intersection of fate. I've lost so many friends and family, it's not easy to be the one left behind. I have to believe they'd want me to live for them and enjoy every moment I have left.
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
Yeah, that's true. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing my poem!
hey to all the beautiful pieces of art here. I love writing and reading poetry, and i may post some of it, so I hope you all like it!!
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