Changing

I’m growing. I’m changing.

Yet, it does not faze me.

I have battled. I have fought.

My mind has been moulded and taught.

 

Yet, through these conquests.

These tiresome, irksome tests

I am found lying on the ground

Waiting. Waiting.

 

I call to you my LORD, my God.

But You do not make a sound.

You look down with shame

Making all thoughts seem lame.

 

If only I could hear You LORD!

As I tug life’s vital chord.

If only I could truly blame You.

But, that’s not the thing to do.

 

When all is said and done

You whisper gently down.

“My child you must trust me, My plan is not yet through”

I shout back.

“It’s so hard to trust, to keep focused!

To believe what You can do!“

 

But You simply smile

And wait a while.

Then bless me with a kiss.

As I remember your promise.

 

Soon your plan will be fulfilled.

I just have to wait some more.

As I walk toward the door.

I shut it tight.

With all my might.

Shutting out all the sin and pain.

 

I want to walk with You LORD.

Not depend on my own understanding.

Or weaken to the worlds fickle demanding’s.

Your steadfast light, to keep me standing.

By underwriter     2/1/2011

Reviews

[SOUL LESS]

My mind has been moulded and taught....how about "Mind moulded and taught." Cut the My. Stop making complete sentences...this is poetry not prose. it increases the flow too.

Making all thoughts lame.: lame:P Find some more vocab...work on flow and effect rather than rhyme.

Add one word (after the word light in the last line) e.g
1) an adjective: Glorious (the cap G is necessary)
2) an "a" word e.g: aglow.

Feel the poem and make it flow.
On the whole, Good Job:PPPP

SOULLESS.

[OT]

a great write here underwriter, perhaps one of your best in my opinion, you offer stark comparisons and imagery, and deal with a potentially incessant topic which is open for interpretation!!

[T]

In reading this I hear my own thoughts. You speak for many and do it well. Good work.

[KAREN]

Oh yeah! it is so hard to wait on the Lord, but he has his on time , and will get to us! Anothe solid write!

[Gone]

This is good stuff. It decribes so much of my own walk with God and I suspect every other commited Christian.

[Graceful]

wow. truly amazing. defently one of my favorites. well done!

[cfix]

WOW THIS is extremely amazing here. I loved this one alot. Very nicely done! So inspiring and wonderful.

[Launa'sWrite]

inspiring and motivating. I read it a few times... i find it straight-forward, and a testament to believing in oneself and something higher than oneself... transcending the ego, if you will... thank you for sharing it! : )