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Once upon a blue moon
Stars came down and showed me you
But the stars didn't know
How very blind I was
Not a cataract, not an act
Just a matter of fact.

Once under an old tree
I kissed you, or you me
We felt we were real
At least that's my high reel.

Yet again cold door opens here
Leads down the dark alleyway
Should i leave it there
Or may I stay,
Please, let me stay?

Reviews

[Mystical Ink]

Your poem is a heartfelt journey through moments of love, longing, and introspection. The imagery of the "blue moon" and stars setting the scene creates a magical and nostalgic atmosphere. The line "Not a cataract, not an act / Just a matter of fact" is particularly poignant, capturing the raw honesty of personal revelation.

The second stanza, under the "old tree" where a kiss shared becomes a moment of perceived reality, beautifully contrasts with the uncertainty introduced in the third stanza. The imagery of the "cold door" and the dark alleyway evokes a sense of hesitation and apprehension, yet the plea to stay underscores a deep desire for connection and continuity.

Your poem flows with a gentle rhythm and evokes a spectrum of emotions, from whimsical romance to introspective doubt. It's a captivating piece that resonates with the complexities of human relationships. Well done!

[nosteprow]

Wow, such a great review. It's the biggest compliment I have ever had. And I don't know how to react, but just to say a huge thanks!!! Your poems hit close to heart, read them all, loved them all. Good job and best of luck!

[Mystical Ink]

Wow, thank you for sharing your thoughts! It means a lot to me. Also, it's fantastic to hear that my poems connected with you on such a personal level. Looking forward to sharing more poetry with you in the future!