My 'This I Believe' Essay

Could you please help me edit this?

            I’m not sure if I believe directly in karma, I’m not sure if I believe that only bad things happen to good people or vise versa, but I am sure that I believe in the card theory.

            I call it a theory because it is. It is nothing more then a speculation that helps me keep my head high.

            Back in ninth grade a raven haired, passionate English teacher introduced me to the idea that life is like a deck of cards.

            Right before class this teacher would write a quote on the board. The objective was to have the students write about how the quote made them feel, or what it made them think.

            I was always the one in class to take great joy out of the discussions that happened because of these quotes. Before I had never thought about life in such terms, but the more I thought about it, the more it made sense.

            In a complete set there are four aces, four two and four of every other type of card. When that deck is shuffled we never know where the ace is, or where the two is.

            So then you can think of the happenings of life like drawing one of those cards. An ace represents something good, and a two represents something bad. There is no particular card game I have in mind; I just take the card at face value.

            Not to self-pity but life has been tough for me so far. The sadness and despair I felt for years became less heavy when I thought about what my teacher said about life and a deck of cards.

             I knew deep down that if I waded though the strong, negative emotions there would come a time where life would be easier. If I held on I believed I would draw an ace.

            Along with this belief I know all good things most came to an end. Years from now I will come upon a trial worthy of a three or two but I know that will pass because my life is like a deck of cards and within time I’ll draw a bigger and better card.

Reviews

[EileenMarie]

This is an interesting theory. I also like the positive ending.
Great poem!

[PetiteGemini]

This is a very good point. Life is like a deck of cards. You never what you are going to get. It is just by chance if you get a 2 or an Ace. I really liked this and the aspect of it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the logic of the desk of cards. I do believe in karma. I pay for all my bad deeds in the end. I learn to be kind and say nothing negative. You had a very good teacher. Life is like a deck of cards. Never know what the day will bring. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tina Kline]

This is a really interesting theory and makes sense. Eventually those dark depressive days will end and brighter days will come. Learning to deal with the cards your dealt will help along the way with life, during the good times and during the bad times.

[donella75]

It is interesting to see life so simplified. To me there are so many more aspects to consider, but then I probably think too much. I've drawn a lot of twos these last few years, but here's to hoping for an ace!

[HorrorMaster]

Very good story I like it

[Kate Hunter]

It is a good write. I know a few people who pull about eight twos a day. Well done. Keep writing.

[Sarah J. Mendonca]

The first sentence seems run on. The analogy gets a little off in the middle, after the talk about class. The sudden talk about depression is random and doesn't fit.
If you were to tell me what it is for I could tell you if it is correct for it. Otherwise its good.

[Knuckles]

I've not heard this theory before, but it works for me. Unfortunately too many people these days seem to expect to only pull twos.

[PyroKitty24]

I think the concept in itself is interesting, I had never thought that way. But You asked for editing, so that I will do.

I’m not sure if I believe directly in karma, I’m not sure if I believe that only bad things happen to good people or vise versa, but I am sure that I believe in the card theory.
I think you restated a lot of words that weren't needed in this sentence, though of course you could always keep it like this. I would suggest
I'm not sure if I believe in karma, or that only bad things happen to good people, visa-versa, but I do believe in the 'card theory'.
And I'm not saying your vice versa is spelled wrong. There's many ways to spell that, I believe. It depends on what language you take it from. And that, of course, was only a suggestion.

I call it a theory because it is. It is nothing more then a speculation that helps me keep my head high.
I really liked the second sentence, but I feel like the first is so unneeded. I think you should put something like
"I call it a theory because it is nothing more than a speculation..."

In a complete set there are four aces, four two and four of every other type of card. When that deck is shuffled we never know where the ace is, or where the two is.
The first sentence killed me when I first read it. I had to think about it, which is only good in poetry. I think for the first sentence you should just put:
"In a complete set there are four of every card."

Along with this belief I know all good things most came to an end.
Most should be must

I also think that there are way too many paragraphs here. A lot of these could be combined. Too little paragraphs makes for a hard read, but so does too many. If you want me to give my opinion on paragraph spacing, please do let me know.
And again, all of these edits are just suggestions...except the last one was a typo. Nice work~