I called

I called you to

let you know

I dreamed of you

last night.

 

You were

as graceful

as the day

I met you.

 

In my dream

your legs still

worked. You

were still able

to glide across

the stage.

 

You were

able to talk, to walk,

to sing. In my dream

I watched with

amazement as you

danced to a song

playing in your head.

 

Your hair glistened

like gold. There was

a sparkle in your eye.

It reminded of the old days.

 

I know you can’t call back.

But I’m sure the nurse will

call at noon and tell

if you were able to eat or not.

 

I can guarantee your mom

will call crying. You

may have survived, but

there are times when

you seem dead.

 

You can’t move,

you can’t sing,

you can’t talk

but I know you can hear

so I call

to let you know

I dream about you

    last night.

Author's Note

Sorry the font isn't working right. This never happened to me. This is a story.


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Reviews

[PaperHearts]

Wow! This was a great write. When I first started reading the poem, I really didn't expect the themes that I came across as the poem progressed. The twist in the middle of the piece definitely took me by surprise, but I thought that the way you described the situation was really moving, and beautifully worded. A very emotional and very real piece. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Veronica]

At first I thought it was about someone who you fancied- but then I figured out that it was someone close you knew who got injured....I'm so sorry...:( I liked this poem a lot and I thought it was pretty moving.

[Chris38]

This was a very moving piece which could be about many things, it could be about someone in a coma or someone who has died. Either way it is brilliant.

[OT]

oh what a spin on things - the contrast to the could bes/has beens to the stark reality of now! it has many interpretations both to the point and metaphysical - could read it as it is or look at in terms of a lost love in general - what had been before it was destroyed - the dreams v now!! very good!

[Nothing Personal]

Seems like a call to the person you loved , but who's now lost ( dead)..But as you mention in the poem that's not the likely explanation. The font's fine and I can sense the message of longing you want to convey..Good job..