Walking in The Shadow

She meet me
at a cafe' at the corner
of Clover Street.

We sat down
with hot, sweet
cappuccinos
and bittersweet
memories.

She looked at me
with caring, strong
eyes.
"What's wrong?"

So many times I
been asked this.
I have no reason to
see tomorrow.

There has been
too many times
when I tried so
hard just to fail. 

I took a long sip
of the drink
to delay
my answer,
but I knew I couldn't leave
until I said something.

"Please," She begged
"Tell me. I don't want to
see you suffer any more."

I shrugged not sure what to say.
I'm walking
in the valley
of the shadow of death.
What else needs to be said?

Reviews

[sarah]

This defiantly is one of your best it was strong and left quite a few questions to be answered great write

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

This leaves the reader with questions at the end which is a very good way to leave a work sometimes and maybe offer the reader a possible sequel to the work so that they can think of the many possible happenings in life that could fill in the blank like an incurable illness, being abused by an abusive husband,etc..I was encouraged at your remarks on my work about meeting the airplane face to face..I put a note at the end to explain somewhat the situation..One of the points was that we never know from one second to the next what might happen in our lives that bring us face to face with death and God is there...

This part;
"I'm walking
in the valley
of the shadow of death."
Reminds me of a song.
AMAZING imagery, by the way.
Descriptive and beautiful.

[RebelRegan]

Love it!

[r]

This is amazing; my favorite stanza is the last. It's obvious - why should you need to answer the question? I love this. It's sad, powerful, and solemn. Amazing.

[FaytheFey]

I agree with Nothing Personal.

[Frank F. Atanacio]

a poignant poem, powerfully written and easy to read Kudos

[Nothing Personal]

Cancer /Terminal Illness or wasted away. Has a surreal air around it. I enjoyed it...

[Linear]

That was a strange end, some minor errors, not many, and they did'nt detract from your poem, I enjoyed it, thank you